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7/7/2014 12:12:18 AM Gabe Shelly Posts: 95	The Loneliness does end-- But to the emptiness you will go again. Unfortunate is that lot-- But it only hurts the living, not to those that rot 7/3/'14 edited by Gabe on 7/7/2014
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7/7/2014 8:59:05 AM III III Posts: 1	Begs the Question... To be or not.
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7/9/2014 10:15:08 PM Gabe Shelly Posts: 95	I don't like using a word more than once unless it is an article as 'a', 'an', or 'the'. Lonely sounds too much like loneliness, though sometimes I will use words that sound like other words in poems. Yet, that doesn't happen very often. As for L3, you're right I didn't need it, but what is art without the artist trying to put their own little signature on a piece. I like my poems to rhyme-- it helps me to remember them better. This is so I can call up a sick verse in my head at the crack of a whip, or woo a pretty girl with a sweet little 'Lady' poem that I wrote. I have a head injury so memorizing and reading are two very difficult things for me-- rhyming helps me to overcome that.
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7/12/2014 9:58:40 AM lakindra harley Posts: 2	Can Someone Please Read My Poems, This Is My Life And Something I Want As A Career . Someone Who Knows What They Are Doing PLEASE !!
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