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2/4/2014 8:59:46 AM
Gabe Shelly
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I rage to the wind,
But it does not listen.
For it howls
It howls all it's song and sin
2/02/14
edited by Gabe on 2/4/2014
edited by Gabe on 2/4/2014
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10/4/2014 1:57:49 PM
Bob Atkinson
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Gabe, trite phrases (rage to the wind....howls...song) really don't add much. Have a problem, myself, with winging poems which don't require research adding to the reader's knowledge base. Also, "the, it (used 4 times), and" need to be taken out of this poem, (words that shouldn't be used in poetry). What's left when you do this? Not much. What's left when you leave them in? ditto. Regards, Bob
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