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10/13/2010 5:21:38 PM

valeria iliadou
Posts: 13
This is my new poem.. I hope you understand the feelings in it. I know that those who travel in fields of loss and love, of memories and hopes, of sorrows and light, will understand.


The nights..The nights from so on:
I lay down to sleep and my mind flies.
I watch dreams-movies leading
your hug and your laughter.
Our love too is now in plural.
They are the defenceless loves.
How could you let our one
die left and betrayed?
I am a person
gender female.
I own a heart
gender not female nor male.
Gender empty.
My empty heart.
Loved you.

edited by val_ilia on 10/13/2010
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