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9/18/2010 1:30:46 AM Raquel Rezendes Posts: 4	I had no choice but to let u go I had no choice but to see u go I couldn't take care of u if I could I had no choice but to let u go Every day I think of u Every day I cry for u Every way my love is true Every day I feel blue I wonder if you think of me I wonder if you still love me I hope you are happy and true I wonder if you know I love you Its going on 4 years now You are almost 12 Its going on 4 years now I hope you are doing well I hope your dad is true to you I hope he tells you I miss you I hope your dad doing fine My love for you is so de vine Everyone here says I'm wrong Everyone here says I'm no mom Giving you up was very hard Listening to everyone is very hard I had to do it You know it be true I had to do it But I'll always love you I couldn't fight With your father no more I had to do whats right Costing us togetherness no more Its been 4 years now You look just like me Its been 4 years now Im smiling with glee Your father won't know This ace up my sleeve Of us being together Just you and me The day will come soon When we will hold so dear Eachother's warm embrasse Dont worry its soon I love you with all my heart Hear me my precious one We will be together again As mother and son -- ~Saphire~
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10/15/2010 11:46:17 PM tara jennings Posts: 12	Spell out your words and spell check, improper grammar pulls away some of the very powerful emotion involved.
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