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1/11/2014 2:08:21 AM
James Kelley
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Oasis:
I watched her swim up into the arms of
a flickering sunset,
mouth open,
letting rain
fall on a velvet tongue.
She was a whisper in
the arms of horizon,
lightning strikes
falling beneath her
every stroke.
I followed her to
the edge,
until the weight
of muddy shores,
stifled my breath
and forced my
knees unto the Earth.
In silence,
I devoured the sight,
praying for the strength
to find my way.
-James Kelley 2014, All rights reserved.
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James Kelley
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1/7/2015 1:31:54 PM
Sarah Muldoon
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I love your descriptions in this poem, the meaning I took from this poem is that love is evolution, I enjoyed the read! 
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