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11/21/2013 1:17:51 AM
Kileem Al Lishmiin
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Once upon a time
Some Thing committed a crime
For which penance can never be paid
A place; where the past sleeps
Darkness; make fire and see
The bonds; between now and then
One day, the state, heard the case
And the pleas; of a man
To retain his mane; and stride
Walking, the bent line
Watching, co-incidence; inside and out
Spinning and tracing; with my arms
The circle; with three
Please critique and/or suggest form...
edited by Kileem Al Lishmiin on 11/21/2013
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