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5/24/2013 12:50:31 AM

Nato Calubiran
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Cigars left aside
Muddied floors
The rain isn't stopping
The thunder roars

A creaking door
The windows are open
Shadows rise
Then glasses were broken

Hello there
Would you come out and play
As the children stare
Ready to slay
You run and run
The fun has just begun
The moment you'll hold still
You'd feel a chill
The moment you turn back
The moment you'll die
Tripping, a branch of a tree
Children's faces with glee
You shout and cry
Asking the reason why

As you wake up from this bad dream
You'd realize you're in bed
You'd just hurt your head
Drink a pill
Think slowly
Think still
Someone might enter
Yes a child will
Asking you
Would you come out and play?

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edited by Yamawaro on 5/24/2013

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