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11/24/2012 4:26:20 PM

Lynn Dolly
Posts: 133

In the shower I start to cry
Tears of joy,
All the sad ones have dried

Feels amazing to feel loose ends sewingtogether
Imagine in a few years, my blanket willbe jammed pack
Unattainable dreams I had as a child
Will actually come true, just seems toowild

You work hard and harder and evenharder
Eventually it pays off
The fresh oxygen seems surreal
When you do it for love or purpose
All the work seems like no big deal

Hard work makes for clearer mirrors,
The lines and wrinkles show proof yourhonest and sincere
No need for makeup, just take care ofyourself
Positivity is a magnet, a powerstronger than you will provide stampedes of help

Most millionaires don't appear by somelucky lad rubbing a bottle
Took one man, or two men
Or one idea that took hours of work anddedication to iron out
Those who call it overnight success
They just benefit from others work, butare too lazy to put forth their best

The fire of “I can and will”outlives the sparks of “one day”
When progress is made, makes that firegrow stronger and willful
Doesn't matter what anyone else wantsyou to do or say.
They can complain, they can save money,they can do whatever they want
It gets harder to empathize for themwhen lazy ways start to taunt.

In a world where many judgesignificance by your employer
You dare start something new, they'reyour new destroyer
Some will pick you apart or turn theirheads which can make you blue
But your doing something they'd neverdo, making your dreams true
edited by svlynn18 on 11/24/2012

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