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11/9/2012 8:31:33 AM

Lynn Dolly
Posts: 133
Walmart, you are the Bermuda triangle of business.
There's no way Mother Earth would've birthed something so vicious


You treat everyone that comes in your path as if they're a snail
You pour the salt, sit in your china made thrown and laugh laugh laugh


No one stays on top forever
I see the sun setting on you days of terror


If Jack from the Beanstock was real,
Instead of throwing a wedding
I'd pay him to put smash you with his foot!
edited by svlynn18 on 11/9/2012
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