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8/23/2012 12:54:19 AM
Taylor Jenkins
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This poem is still quite rough, but I seem to have hit a rock. Any and all feedback would be fantastic!
Thank you in advance.
It’s a hunger for you
One you can’t satisfy
You settle down
Then you wonder why
Tie one down
Then on to the next
With little mind
To those you oppress
But without runners
There is no race
No way for you
To taste the chase
With your sly tongue
And your foolish smile
Recruiting isn’t hard
But you’ll bore after a while
edited by Adberian on 8/23/2012
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With a handshake.
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