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7/17/2012 10:08:47 AM
William Hughes
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When she's not there my soul feels empty
My mind knows well the spot that she should be
Caramel skin that i can't ignore
She makes a silent sound that makes my mind roar
She transcends the word beauty with her faced shaped like so
Her body moves smoothly and suggest an athletic flow
A smile that charges the heart
Teamed with a laugh that tears my body apart
Her beauty can be compared to that of a star
Her allure suggest she's an angel from afar
If i had a gold lamp, One wish would be enough
To be together eternaly, and to be in loves touch
My goal is to embrace her and to hold her tight
For her to trust me in the darkest of nights
And as time wears on, for two to become one
When together forever, my goal will be done.
edited by William49 on 7/17/2012
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7/22/2012 6:30:21 AM
Lynn Dolly
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I love this! Who ever your angel is, she's missing out ))
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10/14/2012 5:29:42 PM
Joni Havard
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i agree with svlynn 18 whoever this chick is shes soooooooooo missing out big time!!! your a great poet keep up the extremely amazing work!!
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