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One Time Too Many- Senryu Strings II

One time too many
maximum number of hits 
heart in rebellion

Keep your own baggage
I can hardly carry mine
help me don't harm me

No way to go back
Heart in hibernation mode
Sweet oblivion

Eileen Manassian

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  1. Date: 8/30/2014 8:28:00 AM

    These are very effective, I van relate. For me sleep is my hibernation mode, things really do look better in the morning.
  1. Date: 8/29/2014 11:56:00 PM

    I enjoyed your poems. They're excellent. Happy writing and God bless you. Love and prayers, Gina
  1. Date: 8/29/2014 9:17:00 PM

    my, a creative package painfully realistic and so well expressed, elieen.., huggs
  1. Date: 8/29/2014 8:34:00 PM

    The exhaustion of a heart, lost patience, too many bruises, I know this too Eileen. Every time I try to tuck my heart to sleep, it cries, yells, and fights to taste more battle, more love.My heart is a light sleeper, I guess my heart can sleep when its dead : ) Justin
  1. Date: 8/29/2014 7:16:00 PM

    I love all your three senryu but my favourite is the second one-Sad but guess life has to have its sad moments to make us appreciate that sweet oblivion in tomorrow.Love love them.
  1. Date: 8/29/2014 4:24:00 PM

    Beautiful as always, Elieen. Loved the hibernation image...well done.
  1. Date: 8/29/2014 2:27:00 PM

    Dear Eileen, It's so sad to think of a heart in "hibernation mode," but I'm right there with you. The middle verse is amazing. Indeed, "Keep your own baggage." People want mates who are baggage-free, but they carry a lot of their woes with them wherever they go. Excellent poem! Love, Carolyn

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