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Blame Game: Trial and Denial Rewrite

Original Version (Quatrain):

Again I'm put on trial,
a judgment so tortuous;
but you are in denial–
to see that takes no genius.

When letting go of a grudge
I see you're in no hurry;
but who appointed you judge?
I've yet to see your jury.

So quick to point your finger
at everyone except you;
you're an adult, act mature.
You have confessing to do.

Go on, confess whenever 
the truth you refuse to face;
you can't deny forever
that you're a complete disgrace.

You love to play the blame game
so let's play another round;
what's wrong– are you too ashamed
to turn your finger around?

New Version (Song Lyrics):

You’re so devoted to all your grudges,
You cherish them like they're a prize;
You hold them with pride on your pedestal
Bursting with bliss as your relationships die. 

Next time you frame everyone's mistakes 
And hang them right above their head, 
You should hang up a mirror as well
And take a good look at yourself instead.

You love to play the blame game
So let's play another round;
What's wrong- are you too ashamed
To turn your finger around?

You're so foolish to expect anybody 
To respect a narcissistic point of view;
Within your childish perception the lens
Is solely focused on you, you, you, and you.

Next time you frame everyone’s mistakes 
And hang them right above their head, 
You should hang up a mirror as well
And take a good, long look at yourself instead.

You love to play the blame game
So let's play another round;
What's wrong- are you too ashamed 
To turn your finger around?

Yeah, you love to play the blame game
So let's play another round;
What's wrong- are you too ashamed
To turn your finger around?

By Anne Currin

3/29/2013 For Debbie's Metamorph Contest 



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  1. Date: 5/18/2013 5:38:00 PM

    Anne, again here to wish you the best. Although I haven't heard from you, I am sending you a blessing through space of good thoughts and kindness for a kindred spirit. Best of May and wishing happiness for you.
  1. Date: 5/15/2013 7:57:00 PM

    Hi Anne, I miss your visits. I hope you are over your cold.
  1. Date: 5/15/2013 10:03:00 AM

    Belated big heartfelt congratulations on your awesome win here my dear friend Anne. I'm so happy and grateful to read this amazing write of yours once again and comment on it for the second time. Thank you so much as well for your very inspiring comments on my poem Sea In Life. I'm so sorry if the expression comes only now because I've been away for two weeks. Hope you're doing great in school! Good luck and best wishes always! love lots, Leonora
  1. Date: 5/11/2013 3:00:00 PM

    clever indeed i like song writers and have writen a few myself . keep up the good work.
  1. Date: 5/8/2013 12:35:00 PM

    very clever idea reminds me of my devious was her name poem the line blame game xxx davidscott
  1. Date: 5/6/2013 7:40:00 PM

    Hi Anne, are you finished school now? Looking forward to reading more of your poems. Take care, hugs Rick
  1. Date: 5/1/2013 6:01:00 PM

    Anne, Congratulations :-) In Debbie's "Metamorph" contest. always~ PD
  1. Date: 5/1/2013 10:14:00 AM

    "When someone is pointing the the finger they must remember that 3 fingers are pointing back at them" This is what is wrote on the wall of the G-Block dayroom at the Darington Unit. It's a Penitentairy in the State of Texas no doubt about that!
  1. Date: 4/30/2013 12:22:00 AM

    Excellent. Great topic. Both are amazing write. Enjoyed reading it. Tfs
  1. Date: 4/29/2013 7:07:00 PM

    I am wishing you well. I am sure you are too busy or occupied to be here now, but I wanted to say that you are just wonderful if these words of yours be any indication!
  1. Date: 4/29/2013 2:09:00 PM

    Great topic that you have chosen on which to write a poem..Enjoyed reading both versions..Some people live their lives harboring grudges and planning on getting even..Congrats on your great win..Sara
  1. Date: 4/29/2013 10:23:00 AM

    both are so amazing <3 Congratulation dearest sista poetess Anne for your win YAY... luv and hugs <3 Sk
  1. Date: 4/28/2013 10:29:00 PM

    I like the first version its pure and you
  1. Date: 4/28/2013 4:49:00 PM

    You could use either of these in a song, they both have the basis of good lyrics, the chorus works in either. Well done. Take care, Richard
  1. Date: 4/28/2013 2:49:00 PM

    very cool. I like them both as well. I love the last two lines. The perfect kick to end it all
  1. Date: 4/28/2013 9:18:00 AM

    I love both piece... They are both great... Congrats on your win~A.O
  1. Date: 4/25/2013 7:02:00 PM

    I love your lyric song Anne, this is really reminds me of something in my time, lol, congrats on your win too, I'm going to fave this one :) hug, Yanny
  1. Date: 4/25/2013 5:36:00 PM

    hey, I see you got a congrats so it means you WON. YAYYY for you!!! And I wanted also to say thanks for my win with strangler's wood.Thanks so much.
  1. Date: 4/25/2013 4:35:00 PM

    Spectacular piece and win! Congratulations. Hugs Rick
  1. Date: 4/25/2013 3:44:00 PM

    Some dynomite work above I'd love to hear you sing it! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
  1. Date: 4/25/2013 12:43:00 PM

    Anne, definitely one of the best in the contest and I like the refrain placement in the lyrics---well deserved win! btw, thank you as well for the placement in your contest!
  1. Date: 4/25/2013 10:13:00 AM

    Many congratulations Anne luv , well done
  1. Date: 4/25/2013 8:35:00 AM

    Good mornin Anne
  1. Date: 4/24/2013 2:03:00 PM

    Excellent job with transforming this piece! I like the reworked one better. ~That was some contest you had. It is quite an honour to be placed among eight. Thank you for the chance.
  1. Date: 4/23/2013 7:16:00 AM

    Had to drop by and read this beauty again, Anne...In addition to being a fine poet you come across to me as a songwriter too...True? - Tim
  1. Date: 4/21/2013 11:40:00 AM

    This is really good Anne, i can relate to everything here, very well done, blessings, Carl
  1. Date: 4/20/2013 7:52:00 PM

    I Love this sweet Anne, You have such a natural flow to your writing that just pulls the reader in. Keep up the great poetry...I love the lyric version best since I love music so much. Have a great night : )
  1. Date: 4/20/2013 7:11:00 PM

    Sweet dreams Anne, I hope you are having an excellent weekend.
  1. Date: 4/18/2013 9:48:00 PM

    Hello Anne...Your words say it beautifully.Your face tells it all....Thanks for your words on my work.....rick
  1. Date: 4/18/2013 5:49:00 AM

    ........................ ‡ Pss., Thank You, For Your Beautiful Kind Visit; Ever Sooo Joyful! ˜ By The Way, What Type Of Lipstick Is Your Lovely Beauty Wearing In Your Beautiful Picture, Sweet Beautiful Anne ? I Love It A Lot ! Have A Beautiful Day ˜ My Love, Always, Rachel *
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