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The Old Tower

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Below is the poem entitled The Old Tower which was written by poet Shadow Hamilton. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

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The Old Tower

Many ages the old tower had stood
yet once it had been the very centre
of activity to all who enter
for centuries now  the weather withstood

Witness to many battles all hard fought
many feasts and weddings held in its halls
and fine chargers housed within its stalls
yet now looking back it was all for nought

Time had taken its toll, now just a shell
ravaged by weather, could it be saved?
the man stood looking and his heart craved
here in this tower he would like to dwell

Work started it was long and arduous
slowly the tower returned to glory
with the new stone brought in from the quarry
at last done it now stood victorious



my first attempt at enclosed rhyme hope I
got it right

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  1. Date: 1/17/2014 9:20:00 PM
    You work with slant rhymes something I approve of, and the poem is beautiful. Maybe you should question the usage of the "all" word on S1 L4. I liked the poem and you have invested an honest measure of work on it. Thank you Shadow. G.

    Hamilton Avatar Shadow Hamilton
    Date: 1/18/2014 4:31:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    hi Giorgio and ty so much for your suggestion and honest appraisal and for time spent reading Shadow x smile hug
  1. Date: 1/17/2014 8:21:00 PM
    Sounds good to me Shadow..really enjoyed this..luv,Deb

    Hamilton Avatar Shadow Hamilton
    Date: 1/18/2014 4:29:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    hi Deb ty very much Shadow x smile hug
  1. Date: 1/17/2014 7:19:00 PM
    I think you did well and I love the poem. Great story Shadow. Change toil to toll, a small typo.

    Hamilton Avatar Shadow Hamilton
    Date: 1/17/2014 7:32:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    ty Rick I altered it as suggested tnx Shadow x smile hug