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Room Service

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Room Service

Satisfy my ugly needs-
While you're down there on your knees!

In your Garden spit my seed-
A flower blooms betwixt the weeds!

Gentle hands of supple Man-
Upward stroke to take a stand!

"Enter me!" your eyes command-
To an undiscovered land!

Oh, my Darling, sweetly spread-
Your love and limbs all o'er my bed!

*Lyrics to a song I wrote ;)

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  1. Date: 1/6/2014 7:03:00 PM
    Hah! Not what I expected when I clicked the title of the poem to read. I love how you worded it all, particularly the second stanza--erotically poetic! There's a hot emotion surfacing as I read these words. Great one! Always, Laura

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    Date: 1/7/2014 7:08:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks, Laura. It's tricky to be explicit without being explicit, if that makes sense. I like a "read between the lines" dirty poem. Glad you enjoyed :)
  1. Date: 1/5/2014 9:19:00 PM
    This is a little over the edge for me, i have comment well written. cheri

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    Date: 1/6/2014 6:12:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks, Cherl :)
  1. Date: 1/5/2014 9:18:00 AM
    Very evocative and erotic and still site appropriate, a sound gut punch to the heart of the matter. Light & Love

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    Date: 1/5/2014 9:49:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks as always, Debbie :)
  1. Date: 1/4/2014 9:11:00 PM
    Gosh Chan what a piece of writing, so naughty and sensual. Nice work.

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    Date: 1/5/2014 7:31:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks, Scott. As I have said, I like being "dirty" without being explicit; it's much more fun that way ;)
  1. Date: 1/4/2014 10:07:00 AM
    Chan The Man I wasn't expecting to turn red this morning from blushing. LOL You bad bad boy turning my innocent little mind into mush. HEE HEE Nice job my dear friend Thanks so much for the placement in your contest. I am humbled and flattered. Love and Hugs Sweet Pea

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    Date: 1/4/2014 10:16:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    LOL! Thanks, Sweet Pea! And your win was well-deserved <3 :)
  1. Date: 1/3/2014 8:27:00 AM
    Oh Gosh! This is another unique and intelligent composition, Chan. I've read it three times and enjoyed it all over again. I believe you had a good xmas & a promising New Year. Friend, JM

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    Date: 1/3/2014 1:35:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks, JM; good to hear from you! I hope your Christmas and New Year went well. Wishing you nothing but inspiration. creativity and prosperity for 2014 :)