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Below is the poem entitled Your Beginning which was written by poet Laura Breidenthal. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

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Your Beginning

Vacant longing in a sacred bind
Broken by love’s flaw
Eyes spill jewels upon the kind
Taking all . . . taking all
Kiss a drop of falling rain
Rising over the fears
Yank the warmth out of the pain
To welcome yester-tears

It was never about me,
Just falling around me
Rejoice with me as they take me all
And as I descend,
As I descend to face the night,
Know that my end, know that my end
Is your beginning

Chilled to the aching bone
You pick up remnants of the past
Far from home
Where all the emptiness blooms and lasts

Don’t crawl back to me in all your pain
Don’t pick up the crystallizing rain
Run, for my life never mattered
Fragments of this dream—cold and shattered

It was never about me
Just falling around me
Rejoice with me as they take me all
And as I descend,
Know that my end, know that my end


And never goodbye

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  1. Date: 4/23/2014 3:30:00 AM
    Are you David William's sister? You both write very different yet equally splendid pieces.

  1. Date: 12/23/2013 10:39:00 PM
    I can really relate to the loneliness and the despair in this poem. I also love the rhyme and your flow here, and the repetition of the lines. You are a very talented poet, Laura! Keep up the amazing work!

  1. Date: 12/7/2013 8:22:00 PM
    A little music would enhance these eloquent words so much, a wonderful write here Laura, blessings Carl

  1. Date: 12/6/2013 7:05:00 PM
    Very beautifully written, sister Laura. . . I love this part and it has been a pleasure to read your fascinating rhymes - "Know that my end, know that my end Is your beginning" I agree with Stephen: the repetition is brilliant. Keep it up! -Dave, your silly brother x - DD I'm rating this a 6 out of 7.

    Ponce Avatar Jake Ponce
    Date: 4/23/2014 3:32:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    And this comment just answered my question. LOL Keep writing, you guys! :D
  1. Date: 12/6/2013 2:51:00 PM
    - Laura, your poetry fascinates me .... They are usually deep with clear meaning and written proficient - Have a great weekend. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

  1. Date: 12/6/2013 9:36:00 AM
    Such a well written poem Laura, Very nicely done....Hugs....Roger

  1. Date: 12/4/2013 3:59:00 PM
    † I Really Dig The Voice Her Depth These Notes, Sweet Beautiful Laura ˜ Man Its Like No Heart Left Behind, You Know ? Beyound All The Special Effects Theatrical Hollywood Gizmo No, Constructed Pages Nor Fantasies; Just The Real Deal Jill! ˜ But One Thing Aside This Truth I Also Do Know, I Admire Your Beauty ˜ Happy Holidays, And Great Poe ˜ Love John

    Breidenthal Avatar Laura Breidenthal
    Date: 12/5/2013 8:03:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks friend. Have a good one. :) ~Laura
  1. Date: 12/4/2013 8:34:00 AM
    Deep, dark, & fascinating. Descend/Ascend, holding me close/letting me go....such a war of the heart. Incredible writing.

    Breidenthal Avatar Laura Breidenthal
    Date: 12/5/2013 8:03:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Hey Drake! Thanks for visiting :) ~Laura
  1. Date: 12/3/2013 11:26:00 PM
    Beautiful. I hear a lyrical movement to this verse. Perhaps a song. Love the repetition. It really brings it home. As always I am humbled you work. ~Kilmer

    Breidenthal Avatar Laura Breidenthal
    Date: 12/5/2013 8:03:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    You are correct! So happy to see you around! Thanks so much<3~Laura