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IN RED'S SILENT FURY

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IN RED'S SILENT FURY


Metallic city howls like a wounded animal scraped by nocturnal vigils of grandchildren and elders emaciated like tuberculosis lungs gasping from chug-chugs of tobacco soot... and the face of a night is hammered by ripped moans like plucked strings in motel rooms; pagan women opening limbs for a meal in silent fury. This is the other side of town... beggars peddling hope; factory shoulders ranting over shuffled cards and fired gin as wives’ blistered fingers clean rented pots, gibbering same monotone of hymn, “give us daily bread, daily bread”. Outside, the pier coughs off the commercial honks of weighed cargo reeked with labor’s perspiration, where pawnshops buzz with greed's snicker... the evening owl attempts winks under the grime of bloodied moon… it spits the larynx of tenants’ raged hoots wishing morsels of fresh sunset would pour some grace of life’s salve, before the shrill of red sets in... again.
Color of Sound Contest/ Monterey Sirak by nette onclaud

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  1. Date: 12/12/2013 7:43:00 PM
    Amazing, Nette! Congrats!

  1. Date: 12/12/2013 11:43:00 AM
    Way to go with the sound of color..Congrats..Sara

  1. Date: 12/12/2013 5:56:00 AM
    Reply to your repy to my reply to your...Oh well, you know what I mean...Soup Mail

  1. Date: 12/11/2013 7:10:00 PM
    You just keep pumping out the masterpieces. Congrats on another Win...Roger

  1. Date: 12/11/2013 8:37:00 AM
    nice win...luv...Linda

  1. Date: 12/10/2013 9:47:00 PM
    Congrats on the win, nette

  1. Date: 12/10/2013 9:39:00 PM
    Wow Nette...I LOVE to see this gritty, dark side of you! This reminds me of Subic Bay when I was stationed there but I assume it is about the ghettos of Manila or some other large city? The last line is a true stunner. 'the shrill of red'...WOW

  1. Date: 12/10/2013 5:42:00 PM
    Nette.....CONGRATULATIONS!!!

  1. Date: 12/10/2013 3:54:00 PM
    wow, an amazing poem< nette. BIG congrats on your well deserved win.

  1. Date: 12/10/2013 11:58:00 AM
    An exceptional write from the start Nette, congratulations on your winning poetry love xxx

  1. Date: 12/10/2013 11:15:00 AM
    - Congratulations on your winning poem in: "THE SOUND OF COLOR" contest: Sponsored by: Monterey Sirak - Nice to join and nice to read your poem Nette. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

  1. Date: 12/10/2013 9:57:00 AM
    What can I say to a masterfully creative piece like this? Your images are stunning and powerful. I could imagine the scene and hear the furious moaning, gasping, and howling. Awesome! Congrats on your win and thank you for entering.

  1. Date: 11/22/2013 4:40:00 PM
    nette, wonderful poem.great. (: ) Jenish.

  1. Date: 11/19/2013 6:12:00 PM
    Nette..I must echo pretty much what Richard said...and others too...I'll have to read this again....after the tears have cleared...this just came out of your soul and into words...

  1. Date: 11/19/2013 2:20:00 PM
    a very deeply penned beautifully written piece

  1. Date: 11/19/2013 11:05:00 AM
    OMG, harsh truths and reality we try to close our eyes from. There are slums in every part of the world and we'd rather keep mum about it. But you chose to give a brazen voice to this with blunt and evocative images. I praise you, Nette as I take deep breaths!

  1. Date: 11/19/2013 8:41:00 AM
    This poem made me think of Drake in the imagery and metophors you used. I have to say this really impressed and moved me. I will have to read this one over and over to absorb all the imagery. Outstanding piece! A poet could write a lifetime and never write such an amazing piece. You should be very proud.777777777777777fav!

  1. Date: 11/19/2013 1:47:00 AM
    A very powerful write, Nette...good work.

  1. Date: 11/19/2013 12:06:00 AM
    HEART BREAKING! Your poem, with its vividly emotional content, added to making this a first class work.To feel the hunger , dire need, and agony of poverty in every man, child, woman is mind-blowing. You finally gave the less forunate a name, Nette. How brave of you.

  1. Date: 11/18/2013 5:23:00 PM
    Dear Nette, This is my second comment on this poem today. I deleted the first, for fear that I was unable to convey what I really wanted to say, so I'll just say that this is beautiful. Thank you for this poem that really makes us think about how fortunate we are.

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