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I ask you this

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I ask you this

“If I have to cry to keep you, I will keep weeping.”- The Temptations

If our atmosphere
Becomes a shattered animosity

If our cumulus clouds
Become wrecking balls against our Sun

If the touch of your hands,
Turns into rabid, feline tongue

If your messages of clarity & “I love you” 
Translate into a Mime’s distress signal

If the sway of your rosemary breaths
Disappear

I ask you

Would your love
Your real love
Really
Truly
Make me shed oceanic leaks

While you ride leaky canoe
Above our water garden

Never tossing raft

Never diving in
To become my lighthouse savior

Because love
Real love
Should never
Ever
Make you embrace torment’s cry

Nor should love
Ever reciprocate
With muted stanzas

Date stamped:
“Return to Sender”
©Drake J. Eszes

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  1. Date: 12/24/2013 9:07:00 AM

    Blake, thank you for your kind and generous support this past year. May you have a fine Christmas and a fantastic 2014... Jack

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 12/27/2013 8:40:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    My good man, Jack, you too! Thanks so much! =)
  1. Date: 12/8/2013 7:29:00 PM

    An exquisite piece, Drake. Well done!

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 12/9/2013 9:22:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hi & thanks very much!
  1. Date: 12/4/2013 12:14:00 PM

    drama and love, a perfect combination to express one's deep emotion... I was carried away with those lines,can't even stop my heart for beatting...I felt it!!! you amde me fall in love again...fantastic!!!..one love_AiyaH :")

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 12/4/2013 12:33:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    A deeply awesome comment. Thank you so much, Aiyah! =)
  1. Date: 11/26/2013 11:08:00 AM

    This is a beautiful poem! nothing can move me more than being still and reading. :)

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/26/2013 11:22:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hi Daisy!!! Nice of you to drop in. :) Thank you so much for that charming comment.
  1. Date: 11/18/2013 9:38:00 PM

    Oh the power of your words, they punch a hole through the atmosphere, well done D, xxx

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/18/2013 11:03:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    :) Thank you very much, Rose.
  1. Date: 11/8/2013 1:26:00 PM

    One word: Brilliant!

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/8/2013 3:47:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    =D Thank you, Miss Wattle!
  1. Date: 11/7/2013 4:26:00 PM

    LOVE the message in this one. SO TRUE!!

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/8/2013 10:37:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you very much for that, Andrea. =)
  1. Date: 11/7/2013 3:16:00 PM

    A perfect seven! Amazing poem with such a dramatic ending. Going to my fave. Thank you for sharing this, DD. xoxo

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/7/2013 3:44:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    =D You have no idea how much I appreciate that, PS. You're truly awesome.
  1. Date: 11/7/2013 12:39:00 PM

    fantastic fantasy.

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/7/2013 12:42:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Indeed it is, John! =D Thank you so much!
  1. Date: 11/7/2013 11:55:00 AM

    Gut wrenching circumstance you've depicted.

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/7/2013 12:11:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hey there, Blake! =D Thank you so much.
  1. Date: 11/4/2013 8:56:00 PM

    Amazing verse. Your words are exceptional and mesmerizing. Hell no - I'd never return something so awesome :D hahah Always, Laura

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/7/2013 12:10:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    A smart move, Laura. =D Thank you so much!
  1. Date: 11/3/2013 6:42:00 PM

    Hey Drake...I'm patient I guess...there is that point caring tears turn to pain..then respect is lost...thanks for the wonderful poem sir

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/3/2013 6:47:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Some are patient, yes. I can understand what you're saying definitely. No argument there. Thank you so much, Donna. :)
  1. Date: 11/3/2013 3:11:00 PM

    I really enjoyed this one, partly because I believe I chose the correct corridor of understanding. I spoke of some of the same emotions in my post, "True Love Never Knows Why." The silence of a love unreturned results in an almost unbearable pain. Growing doubt of someone's love for you is hard to bear. I believe we use ink from the same inkwell, but use different quills. Nice, writing. BTW thanks for your comment on "Eternal Hope." I left you a reply on it. -Jake always respecting your craft.

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/3/2013 4:42:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Cheers to you for this. Seriously. Epic comment. I have been on both ends of the spectrum. I see what youre saying loud and clear. Damn. Thanks so much, John.
  1. Date: 11/3/2013 8:58:00 AM

    A stunning write! Love the ending. How sad when love loses its way in the echoing mazes of silence.

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/3/2013 9:05:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    You are quite right, Monterey. Quite right. Thanks so much!
  1. Date: 11/3/2013 7:01:00 AM

    Free flowing art! Nice! Jimbo

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/3/2013 8:12:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    JIMBO! Many thanks sir!!!! =D
  1. Date: 11/2/2013 3:12:00 PM

    Clouds described as 'wrecking balls' against the sun........omg........how your mind conjures up such amazing and wonderful lines.......I am always in awe !! As always.....I loved this one!

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/3/2013 8:12:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    You leave me in that same awe, Carrie. True story! You're are SUPER sweet. Thank you so much!
  1. Date: 11/2/2013 2:35:00 PM

    Hi Drake wow those last 2 stanzas really sum, these fantastic words up. I miss your.poetry:) tyfs...Cherie:0)

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/3/2013 8:10:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hey Cherie! It's been ages! :) How have you been doing? Thank you very much. Ending have to hit hard. I'm glad that did it for you.
  1. Date: 11/2/2013 9:04:00 AM

    Stopped by to read the comments. You have some really good ones here.

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/2/2013 10:23:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Awesome. :)
  1. Date: 11/2/2013 9:00:00 AM

    Wow breath taking. Loved this write. By far one of my favorite poems. you have such great talent.

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/2/2013 10:21:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hey Lisa! Thank you very much. You're very kind to say that. :)
  1. Date: 11/1/2013 9:16:00 PM

    no real love should not make us embrace torments cry...though sometimes it does, made me think of the song by brandy, have you ever loved somebody so much it makes you cry...I think many of us can say we have...now you have me pondering so many thoughts as good poetry often does...excellent poem Drake... from a sincere and beautiful heart it flows :) hugs

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/2/2013 1:45:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Yes, having been on both sides of the fence, I can say it can make us cry. But, that's kind of when you know. That Brandy song is a good example, certainly. I'm glad this is making you think. Thanks so much, Sandra!
  1. Date: 11/1/2013 5:09:00 PM

    I completely agree with you! True and honest love should never make us cry. The only tears that fall, should be tears of joy. An excellent poem, Drake, very emotional and heartfelt. I loved it!

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/1/2013 5:11:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Yes. Right there. Absolutely! It may not always happen that way. But, damn if I ain't going to try! :) Thanks so much, Kelly!
  1. Date: 11/1/2013 5:03:00 PM

    superbly penned beautifully

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/1/2013 5:08:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks a lot, Liam!
  1. Date: 11/1/2013 3:49:00 PM

    Wow, yeah I read this and almost had thoughts of another popular song "Tears of a Clown" by Smokey and the Miracles LOL! Though, the romantic in me is still touched by the gesture...Great lines by you though! MC

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/1/2013 4:28:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    YES! Good call! Great classic. Yes, I can understand why. Many thanks, Marquis!
  1. Date: 11/1/2013 7:54:00 AM

    - Those who do not dare to open their hearts, will never experience true love ..... - Open mind, let the sun  in .... - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/1/2013 8:52:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Amen to that. =) Thank you, Anne Lise!!!
  1. Date: 11/1/2013 2:10:00 AM

    oh Drake, you are the best, you really ask the most poignant questions:) Your language and your poems are all so cerebral, but the inherent tenderness and 'all heart' does come thru in such a sweet way:) I love your work!

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/1/2013 7:06:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    A bright & early blush for my face this morning after your comment! How awesome!!! Thank you so much, Bindu. One has to let their heart shine, you know? ;-)
  1. Date: 11/1/2013 2:06:00 AM

    Love makes you do foolish things. I wonder why that is? Great poem Drake.

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/1/2013 5:08:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hee hee. I know, right? =D
    Crespo Avatar Beverly Crespo Date: 11/1/2013 4:41:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    You're right. Those pesky feelings!
    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/1/2013 7:02:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Because we don't want to lose that feeling. Thank you so much, Beverly!
  1. Date: 10/31/2013 12:11:00 PM

    sometimes, the best way to love the self back is to end something that no longer works for us, no matter how hard this can be....heart-wrenching, drake yet fearless, definite, and empowering...darn superb write!..:) hugggs!

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 10/31/2013 12:19:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    So. Very. True. Your perspective moves me. Thank you so much, Nette. =D
  1. Date: 10/31/2013 9:38:00 AM

    I enjoyed the dialogue this piece creates. I would say that all are worth the tears and if they are not we haven't gotten to know them well enough. Sometimes we have been hurt in ways that prevent us from seeing or being seen and in the end we miss out on the magic that exists at the core of each of us.

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 10/31/2013 9:41:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Quite right. You are a glass half-full heart. Humanity needs more folks like you for the long haul. Thank you kindly, Richard.
    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/31/2013 9:39:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I have added to my favorites!
  1. Date: 10/31/2013 7:12:00 AM

    Breathe taking Drake. I have to love your writes, they are so beautiful, leaving me speechless. I cant choose a favorite line <3

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/1/2013 5:09:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    LOL awesome! =D Otherwise, I'll order you an oxygen tank off Amazon or Ebay. ;-)
    Loveless Avatar Jay Loveless Date: 10/31/2013 4:41:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Haha Ill remember to be sure to catch it, a trick to do around your writing
    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 10/31/2013 7:19:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hey there, Jay! :) Just be sure to catch your breath, ok? I can't have any reader of mine fainting on me, flattering as it is. =D I'm glad you stopped by. Thank you very much!
  1. Date: 10/31/2013 12:31:00 AM

    I'm speechless after i read this. So beautifully written. Drake you're so talented! Its excellent! Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem with us!

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 10/31/2013 6:30:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hi there, Christine! :) Very cool of you to stop by! I do appreciate that. Thank you so much!
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