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Call Me Monday When I've Made My Millions

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Call Me Monday When I've Made My Millions

How true it is- it's you I miss, 
Deep inside my Heart's bare core 
Oblige me, please, with one more kiss-
Oh, my Love- this I implore!
Of you I dream the sweetest dreams, 
That in my arms you hither lie 
When I awake, and seen what I've seen, 
By my own guilt I wish to die!

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  1. Date: 11/18/2013 3:28:00 AM

    The title is a knockout, but I'm not exactly sure how it relates to the text? Loved it though. Does the protagonist really want one last kiss? No! Never! Guilty bugger wants redemption. Or so I say.

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 11/18/2013 5:31:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks for the read and reply, Scott. They title and body are meant to be purposely disparate, but the more I reflect on it, the title may have a deeper subconscious meaning than I initially recognized. I appreciate you stopping by :)
  1. Date: 11/2/2013 1:56:00 PM

    Your work is quite unique... in a fun way!

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 11/2/2013 2:07:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks again, Carol; much appreciated :)
  1. Date: 11/1/2013 9:00:00 PM

    "just "!my blog no place to vent your depression. (: ) Jenish.

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 11/2/2013 8:08:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I wasn't aware I was venting "depression"; I was aware that I was expressing an opinion, which had nothing to do with depression whatsoever. I think something got lost in translation, Jenish.
  1. Date: 11/1/2013 9:52:00 AM

    Thanks for the explanation, I ponder no more. I like all the thought and comments you provoked.

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 11/1/2013 10:14:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks, Richard. I'm always delighted when you stop by. Thanks for the review, my friend :)
  1. Date: 10/30/2013 11:54:00 PM

    It seems like the persona is the only one who can understand what's going on. If you're trying to share an experience, a feeling ... well, then I need some help; I don't know what this persona saw. I wonder if you used the word "die" purposely or if was the first one rhyming with "lie" that you found. And the title ... are you kidding? : D Let's see what else you have ...

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/31/2013 8:43:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    No, the "die" was intentional, not just for a convenient inner rhyme. The title is actually a quote said by my best friend's grandfather and it struck me funny; the title has nothing to do with the poem. What it's supposed to mean is that I have driven my lover away, and when I awake and see that he is gone, I wish to die by my own guilt.
  1. Date: 10/30/2013 5:56:00 PM

    Intriguing post..Its as if someone is in love yet lost his love..the one whom He dreams about through lack of money which makes it impossible to be with his love..Pondering!!!

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/31/2013 8:44:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks for the review, Charm :)
  1. Date: 10/30/2013 5:29:00 PM

    Chan my friend This is an intriguing and interesting write. The reader has to wonder what is going on and what you saw that made you feel like this. Nice job Thanks for the awesome comment on my Devilish Demons poem. Love and hugs Sweet pea

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/31/2013 8:45:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Many thanks for the read and review Sweet Pea! :)
  1. Date: 10/30/2013 4:36:00 PM

    It must have been something very significant, this thing that you saw. Great write...peter

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/31/2013 8:46:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I saw that I had driven my lover away. I might as well explain it since it's really the only intriguing part of the poem. Thanks for stopping by, Peter :)
  1. Date: 10/30/2013 12:15:00 PM

    Great LOVE poem, Archaic! Thanks for sharing. Friend, JM

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/31/2013 8:46:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks, JM :)
  1. Date: 10/30/2013 11:35:00 AM

    Soo are you saying you love both the money and the woman and the woman could love you for your money even though that may not be the case. Also its a good feeling when a man can provide.

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/31/2013 8:48:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    The title and poem and completely disparate; I think I did this for the purpose of ambiguity which seems to have backfired. Thanks for the review, PJ :)
  1. Date: 10/30/2013 11:25:00 AM

    A tale of intrigue. I wonder is it the money and fame you miss or someone's arms? (in reference to the title of course! =P)

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/31/2013 8:48:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I miss the lover I drove away, and my guilt is eating me up when I realize he has left. Thanks, Tom :)
  1. Date: 10/30/2013 8:49:00 AM

    Here I ponder!

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/30/2013 9:01:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Good; that's what I was hoping for. Thanks for the reviews, Richard :)
  1. Date: 10/30/2013 7:36:00 AM

    Interesting work work of a pinning love..I am left with a question at the end as to what you have seen..Thanks for the visit to my page..I liked that word lugubriosity also..Sara

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/30/2013 8:09:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    should say * I wanted the reader to ponder lol ;)
    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/30/2013 8:08:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I left that intentionally ambiguous and vague; I wanted the reader the ponder what it was I saw and decide for themselves. Thanks for the review, Sara :)