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  1. Date: 10/24/2013 7:43:00 AM
    Change smiled to smile and this one will be perfect. I like your style Jancarl. This one made me think of the Bible where it talks of old men having dreams, I don't remember the actual verse. You will fit nicely here at the soup.

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 10/25/2013 1:43:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I meant the smiled in the first line of the last stanza. "and then with a smile she said"
  1. Date: 10/23/2013 12:05:00 PM
    Hello Jancarl, Made me smile and giggle with this lovely one! Very witty my dear poet. Thank you for visiting me and leaving such a nice message. Keep it flowing honey, looking forward to reading more from you. As Always, Shar

  1. Date: 10/19/2013 6:31:00 AM
    - Two thumbs up for "an old man" :)))))) - Have a beautiful weekend! - Relax! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

  1. Date: 10/19/2013 2:20:00 AM
    I LOVE THIS> what this must do to an older man. GOSH. A fave.