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Reaching Out

 
my mind feels cornered again
every thought has me hanging
on sanity's edge

i reach for you
this ringing in my head
offers little hope
as it echoes
through the phone

a momentary pause
before the pre-recorded voice
the usual message after the tone
as the tone of mood changes

i can feel my emotions
fall like shadows
on lonely walls

my air is heavy
like these blades
that press
steel force
against my flesh

a drop of blood 
trickles down
pulsating 
to the tune 
of my heart's beat

darkness draws its line
between life and death
and feeds my thoughts

death dances at my door
and i can feel its cold press
as it cuts through me again
like a blade's edge
steel-force


my version of the poem
Leave a message after the beep
 by Just That Archaic Poet


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  1. Date: 11/13/2013 4:29:00 PM

    I love the suspenseful feeling in these words. Your version of his poem was amazing, Sandra! Congratulations on your well deserved win!...Thank you for the kind congrats on my poem. I appreciate it very much! :)

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 11/13/2013 8:08:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you Kelly...hugs :)
  1. Date: 11/12/2013 11:32:00 PM

    Sandra, for me this is one of the best in the entire contest. Congrats. I am honored to be placed near you in the list!

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 11/13/2013 8:08:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you Andrea :) hugs
  1. Date: 11/12/2013 5:46:00 PM

    Beautifully written.Congrats on your superb win in this contest.Great work ,friend....

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 11/12/2013 7:32:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you my sweet friend...hugs :)
  1. Date: 11/12/2013 12:26:00 PM

    Hi Sandra, I am delighted to be placed in a contest along side your stunning work. I usually try to pick out a favorite line that stands out; in this one, they all do. Captivating~ congrats on your well deserved win :)

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 11/12/2013 7:31:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I am honored to be placed alongside of yours and i knew yours was a winner when i read it... i will be over to congratulate you in a moment :) hugs
  1. Date: 11/12/2013 10:50:00 AM

    congrats on a fine win Sandra

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 11/12/2013 7:30:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you Joseph :)
  1. Date: 11/12/2013 9:43:00 AM

    Sandra---Such an excellent poem and many congrats on your win in the contest!! Julie :-)

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 11/12/2013 7:26:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you so very much Julie :)
  1. Date: 11/12/2013 8:11:00 AM

    Kind of like getting a on hold message when calling the suicide hot line. I so appreciate your poetic artistry Sandra. Congratulations.

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 11/12/2013 7:25:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you so much Richard...i think in his original he was calling a friend and got voicemail instead of them.. hugs :)
  1. Date: 11/12/2013 6:46:00 AM

    Sandra, such an emotional inspiration--a more than deserving win in the contest!

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 11/12/2013 7:24:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you Craig :) hugs
  1. Date: 10/29/2013 11:20:00 PM

    Very nicely written Sandra, I really hope this is a win for you....peter

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 11/12/2013 7:24:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you peter...and it was :) hugs
  1. Date: 10/26/2013 11:46:00 AM

    is this a collaboration Sandra, if so please point out his and your part... I'm only curious... I'll be back to check and see if you replied... hugs.. LINDA

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 10/26/2013 1:13:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    no Linda, not a collaboration, his contest wants you to take one of his poems and rework it into your own piece...his pome was titled leave a message after the beep and this was my take on his poem~ Thank you....hugs Sandy
  1. Date: 10/23/2013 5:42:00 PM

    A very dark, suspenseful, and foreboding poem. I liked it very much! Terrific work! I wish you the best of luck in the contest!

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 10/26/2013 1:14:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you Kelly...hugs :) hope your weekend is great!
  1. Date: 10/20/2013 3:29:00 PM

    stopping by to ask if you are working on something new, sandra.... stay fine..:) huggs

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 10/20/2013 6:32:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    i was working on a new poem...days have been busy, muse has been hushed...got one up though...thanks for stopping by...hugs :)
  1. Date: 10/20/2013 5:13:00 AM

    nicely penned Sandra....I did one called Call optons which is similar to this......thanks for stopping by...

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 10/20/2013 6:34:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you Joseph will have to check it out...was it a remake of Just That Archaic Poet's poem as well?
  1. Date: 10/19/2013 11:14:00 PM

    just stopping by to say hi, didn't see any new poems. dang it.

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 10/20/2013 6:33:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    lol...wrote 3 in two days and then the muse got quiet for a few days...too much going on to think i suppose... ...hello and hugs :)
  1. Date: 10/19/2013 7:52:00 PM

    This was powerfully your own, even if taken by the sponsor's work.....you have made it your own. Beautifully crafted!!

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 10/20/2013 6:35:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you Carrie...i had felt an instant connection with his piece and the words came easy! hugs :)
  1. Date: 10/19/2013 4:43:00 PM

    Hi Sandra, Enjoyable dark night of the soul write..Well done.. Ken

  1. Date: 10/18/2013 8:14:00 AM

    Dark and effective piece. You are so very talented and create significant imagery.

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 10/18/2013 9:08:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you Richard for your kind words :)
  1. Date: 10/17/2013 7:52:00 PM

    WOW, you are so amazing. He is going to flip for this one. He is getting so many good poems, I am now wanting to have people do this for MY next contest but using my own poems. Hmmm, don't know if I should do it or not. I might look too much like a copy cat.

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 10/17/2013 8:43:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you Andrea...i took one of his free verse poems because i figured it would spark my muse...it is a fun contest...hugs :)
  1. Date: 10/17/2013 11:27:00 AM

    Great response!! You are an artist with pen and ink.... Love your style and thoroughly enjoy your posts.... Love and hugs.... Jake

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 10/17/2013 8:42:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you for your visit and comment.... hugs :)
  1. Date: 10/16/2013 4:36:00 PM

    wow amazing beautiful piece

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 10/17/2013 10:11:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you liam :) hugs
  1. Date: 10/16/2013 3:47:00 PM

    very powerful poem is this Sandra,,,

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 10/17/2013 10:11:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you Harry...hugs :)
  1. Date: 10/15/2013 4:58:00 PM

    Really deep! Nice poem

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 10/17/2013 10:12:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you very much Lisa :)
  1. Date: 10/15/2013 3:09:00 PM

    Lordy me Sandra, this is troubling, mesmerizing and absolutely beautiful all rolled into one...Haven't read the original but you sure nailed it! And the winner is...

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 10/17/2013 10:13:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you Tim....I tried to get inside the poet's head to feel what they felt to write this one :) hugs
  1. Date: 10/15/2013 2:59:00 PM

    hauntingly delivered in a semi-abstract tone, sandra.. it flows like a thought hitting rocks and coming down the hillside, bruised.. well-penned!..:) huggs

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 10/17/2013 10:14:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you Nette....I could feel the desperation behind the poet's words as I read the original...hugs :)
  1. Date: 10/15/2013 12:41:00 AM

    Nice poem. I like the contrast that you have made with the ringing in your head and the actual phone itself. They blend quite well.

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 10/17/2013 10:15:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you Christine :) hugs
  1. Date: 10/14/2013 11:02:00 PM

    I have danced with darkness myself Sandra so its hard to say good poem without saying I hope you are beyond this sadness now. I am going to look for a happy poem in your collection before I go.

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 10/17/2013 10:15:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you Michael...It was a remake on another's poets poem :) hugs
  1. Date: 10/14/2013 5:10:00 PM

    Magnificently penned Sandra. Very deep to the core. Hugs,Gail

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 10/14/2013 7:03:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you Gail....hugs :)
  1. Date: 10/14/2013 5:09:00 PM

    A wonderfully work of art you have written here, very nice...peter

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 10/14/2013 7:02:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you Peter...it was fun taking someone else's thoughts and making It into a new poem... :)
  1. Date: 10/14/2013 4:21:00 PM

    dazzling beautiful piece

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 10/14/2013 4:24:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you so much my friend :) hugs
  1. Date: 10/14/2013 1:41:00 PM

    .....beeep.... a sad poem....beeep :*(

    Adams Avatar Sandra Adams Date: 10/14/2013 4:24:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you...I chose a sad one from the poet to rework, so I had to put myself in that mine frame... hugs :)