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Independent Woman

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Independent Woman

She smiles upon coated slate.

Her skeletons become coagulated whispers
Of yesterday

Another blissful awakening
This shedding of redemptions’ sin
Under elastic dialects

Closure within ephemeral slow dances
Irregular beats of her drum

Now
Steadfast acoustic riffs
Forge constellations' new tomorrow

As she swims through cashmere laden sands
Without the need to float
On dependency’s raft

©Drake J. Eszes

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  1. Date: 11/7/2013 11:48:00 AM

    I enjoyed reading this some "upbeat" thoughts. Thank you.

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/7/2013 12:02:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hey, Blake! =) I do appreciate that.
  1. Date: 10/24/2013 3:51:00 AM

    Good morning Drake! "Without the need to float"--so profound. That is the essence of independence.

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 10/24/2013 9:01:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Yes, absolutely! Thank you, Beverly!
  1. Date: 10/21/2013 12:09:00 AM

    Beautiful depiction of an independent woman...A masterpiece. Well done my friend!

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 10/21/2013 12:16:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hey there, Sarai! You're way too kind. Thank you for that!
  1. Date: 10/5/2013 11:54:00 PM

    I love reading this great & very inspiring stellar poem of yours my dear friend, Drake. I love when men adore women because of their uniqueness & strength. Thanks a lot for sharing! Have a great weekend! love lots and big big hugs, Leonora

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 10/6/2013 7:12:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I think it's a necessary thing that both value each other, yes. Thank you for stopping by here, Leonora. It's good to see you here again. :)
  1. Date: 9/27/2013 10:28:00 AM

    Hi Drake, Some really good ink here..It was a pleasure to stop by...Thanks for your visit to my verse.. Ken

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 9/27/2013 10:45:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Many thanks, Ken! =D
  1. Date: 9/25/2013 7:27:00 AM

    Good morning Drake

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 9/25/2013 7:27:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hola senor! =D
  1. Date: 9/24/2013 7:50:00 PM

    I can really relate to this poem. I know what it feels like to fight for independence from others and from one's self. Excellent work, Drake!...Thank you for the placement in your contest and for the nice comments. I appreciate it very much! :)

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 9/24/2013 7:58:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Fight for what we love, what we believe, and how we believe/love in ourselves. Wonderful. Thank you much, Kelly! And, you're quite welcome. You earned it. :)
  1. Date: 9/24/2013 11:25:00 AM

    stilll a beauty, drake!.. but i guess i hafta to holler " got more" before this page melts, lol.. the old hag nags again..:) thanks for your visits; just delighted.. and oh, happy you enjoyed my piece for your recent contest...that's exactly where i am right now..:) huggs!

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 9/24/2013 3:13:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    YAY! =D You're very welcome. Your poem was a delight. New poem tomorrow. ;-)
  1. Date: 9/24/2013 7:40:00 AM

    Hi Drake.waking up .. catching up on your newest poems this morning..this one got me...it really is freeing when you can shed some of those redemptions sins..and get on with new tomorrows....you hit this one dead on....awesome...

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 9/24/2013 8:00:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    WOO HOO! Thank you so much, Donna! =D It's great to see your thoughts on this. I had a feeling you'd appreciate this. :)
  1. Date: 9/24/2013 7:33:00 AM

    This almost felt like you where describing music. Mind you each woman is unique and beautiful like a song. I enjoyed your poem Drake, mind you that is not unusual. Have a great day Drake. You remind me of the Song Handy Man, all the girls are gathering around and a few of us fellows are looking for pointers.

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 9/24/2013 7:59:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    LOL! A very, very charming comment. Interesting call out on that song...very interesting. lol I never looked at it that way. :)
  1. Date: 9/23/2013 10:41:00 PM

    I am in Vancouver Canada My Ph No is 604 290 6575 cel or 604 530 0556 Res Vic I still can't get a message out from the REPLY link of the message inbox

  1. Date: 9/23/2013 7:46:00 PM

    Drake I am not able to get the message out through the comments section. It keeps converting large CAPS to small caps so of course it won't go out. See last message Vic Pister

  1. Date: 9/23/2013 7:43:00 PM

    Drake Thank you for the compliment. I don't know how interesting I would be as a guest on your show but I am willing to give it a go, I hope you're not disappointed When wrote poem I was in precisely that place I believe that there are many people, as they go through the various phases of their lives, face this same dilemmPlease let me know the next step Vic Pister

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 9/23/2013 8:08:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I'll Soupmail you and we'll talk. :)
  1. Date: 9/23/2013 5:30:00 PM

    ...whispers of yesterday... today.

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 9/24/2013 7:58:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Indeed, thanks Gerald.
  1. Date: 9/23/2013 3:33:00 PM

    I felt the poem intensify and then the ending was tremendous. Speaks volumes.... Great work poet! Cindy

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 9/23/2013 5:27:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    =D You're very kind, Cindy. Thank you!
  1. Date: 9/23/2013 12:05:00 PM

    Blissful closure and steadfast. I get it.

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 9/23/2013 2:24:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Awesome! Thanks, John! =D
  1. Date: 9/23/2013 11:29:00 AM

    Its refreshing to read a man encouraging and embracing a woman's independence Drake. Absolutely love this empowering piece of yours. ;)

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 9/23/2013 2:24:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Awww! :) That was the point of this whole piece. Thank you for getting it. =D You rock, Wilma!
  1. Date: 9/23/2013 9:36:00 AM

    You have painted brilliantly the beauty of a women's full independence and strong self esteem my friend. Every women needs to read this!! Nicely penned and thank you for stopping by my Halloween poems. Hope I didn't scare you. LOL Big hugs, Gail

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 9/23/2013 10:29:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I wholeheartedly agree. Every woman should! Scare me? No way! It'll take a lot more than that. =D But, A+ on your effords. Thank you so much, Gail!
  1. Date: 9/23/2013 9:02:00 AM

    Drake your mind works like a puzzle, maze, a rubics cube LOL I like figuring out the right combination, it's a challenge & a rush to read. Really enjoyed!!!, Thanks for sharing....Cherie~<3

    thomas Avatar cherie thomas Date: 9/23/2013 4:54:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Lol, me either Drake ha ha :0)
    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 9/23/2013 9:13:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Good, at least you can value & appreciate my approach to the message. I don't cater to shortcuts in my style. There are too many of those in life today anyway, causing it to spoil some folks. For me, unwrap the gift, unwrap the layers, slowly. Thank you so much for this, Cherie. FYI, I could NEVER solve a Rubiks Cube. lol
  1. Date: 9/22/2013 8:11:00 PM

    Wow! Drake! I can hear your voice reciting this complex art! as I now know your reading style very well! Great work! jimbo

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 9/22/2013 8:42:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    My man, Jimbo!!! Thank you so much. =D
  1. Date: 9/22/2013 1:21:00 PM

    So concise, yet with incredible power in every word. Masterfully crafted

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 9/22/2013 7:53:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Monterey, thank you so much for that. :) I think this writing was a bit necessary.
  1. Date: 9/21/2013 12:07:00 PM

    She is a go-getter... Confidence and good self esteem makes a beautiful woman. Good piece, Drake!

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 9/21/2013 12:27:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Yes sir. Amen to that. Thank you very much, Marlon! =)
  1. Date: 9/21/2013 11:35:00 AM

    oh my, powerful and tightly paced, drake... self-relaince is the most healthy way to live and is tonic for the soul...this woman is a tough nut to crack, and your lines express this so well-- raw and beautiful!..:) huggs

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 9/21/2013 11:57:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Spot on, dear Nette! =D Indeed, the woman in this piece is a toughie! Thank you so much!
  1. Date: 9/21/2013 7:41:00 AM

    Wow..This poem is very deep..Its like a continuation of your previous poem..The IR regular heartbeat..the whispers in yesterday..The redemption of sin...So deep these thoughts.The ephmeral dance like a short lived sand wish and then towards the end-To swim through cashmere laden sands without the need of that raft.I guess that would be an independent woman indeed....Though that raft..She might be grateful for it...Excellent dream of non independent women penned.Love the voice echoeing.

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 9/21/2013 8:37:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    You're quite right, yes. Thank you so very much, Charmaine. :)
  1. Date: 9/21/2013 4:47:00 AM

    A very interesting write, thank you!

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 9/21/2013 8:35:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hi, Bindu. Nice to meet you! Thank you very much!
  1. Date: 9/21/2013 1:04:00 AM

    love your metaphor and the part about her not having need of dependency's raft. That was cool!

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 9/21/2013 8:35:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    :) Yes, that line was an important one. Thank you so much, Andrea!
  1. Date: 9/20/2013 8:57:00 PM

    I love the following line, "AS she swims through cashmere laden sands" That is so descriptive and perfect for the description of this woman! She is truly special, I wonder if you met her would you date her? She is quite unique and beautifully put together...it's like you pieced together an special woman, I love this poem my friend! Great Work!!

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 9/21/2013 8:34:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I definitely would date her. There are things that turn me off. One of those things is a lady who won't stand up for herself. Because, to me, that tells me that we would be able to push each other through the hard times. There would be no fear or uncertainty that "love" would become one-sided. Many thanks, Russell! I'm glad you're feeling better!
  1. Date: 9/20/2013 8:30:00 PM

    Great poem Drake. I have always been very independent. Thanks for sharing and for your visit...... Lucilla

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 9/21/2013 8:31:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    That is always a great thing to read. :) Keep that up! Thank you, Lucilla!
  1. Date: 9/20/2013 7:52:00 PM

    Enjoyed your poetry D, xxx

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 9/21/2013 8:29:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks, Rose.
  1. Date: 9/20/2013 3:34:00 PM

    stunning poem Drake a true portrayal of independency excellent pen Shadow x smile

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 9/20/2013 7:08:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hey Shadow!!!! Many, many thanks! =D
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