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Fat Smoker

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Fat Smoker

Barely can I even breathe
(I'm always out of breath!)
Oh, my lungs of me bereaved-
I smoked them to my Death!

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  1. Date: 10/25/2013 4:44:00 PM
    Chan This is a short but powerful write and could scare a smoker into quitting immediately. LOL Nice job Your comment on my Senility poem was funny. The holes in your brain lets the old thoughts out and new in. HEE HEE Hugs

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    Date: 10/26/2013 6:55:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    I wish I could quit. I did quit for over six months a few years ago but I missed it too much. Every time I would catch a whiff of cigarette smoke, it was like smelling a burger on a grill. I truly enjoy smoking, but I'm sure it will be the death of me lol Oh, well ;) <3
  1. Date: 9/25/2013 9:50:00 PM
    can relate 2 tis 1 quite well

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    Date: 9/26/2013 7:26:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    lol I'm glad someone relates to it; thanks for your feedback, Vin :)
  1. Date: 9/20/2013 2:10:00 AM
    I guess when you all look back now I'm sure that there are things that you've wished that you could have done differently. That's what I sense while perusing this piece Archaic. Another quality write from you that I truly enjoyed.

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    Date: 9/20/2013 6:33:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    One of my biggest problems is that I NEVER learn my lesson. Smoking will probably kill me, but it's a vice I enjoy too much to give up right now. I'll have a different opinion when I get a terminal illness I suppose lol. Thanks for the read and review, Mustapha :)
  1. Date: 9/18/2013 10:24:00 PM
    Black humour at its best. Best wishes Linda x

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    Date: 9/19/2013 8:53:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Hi, Linda. Thank you! This poem is a satirical one about myself. I am the "fat smoker" alluded to in the piece. Thanks for taking time to read and review :)