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Carry Grief as a Shield

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Carry Grief as a Shield

Release relief, however brief-
Let it come to crush my grief!
I can't go on when Hope is gone;
Biting Life with softened teeth
Why ponder things that make no sense,
Why take my Mind to clean and rinse;
To wash away a long decay
(And left with no defense)

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  1. Date: 11/21/2013 6:02:00 PM
    Chan The Man I can feel the grief in this poem from beginning to end. You captured how grief can affect us in many ways. Nice job my friend Thanks for the insightful and nice comment on my Devil Games. poem

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet
    Date: 11/22/2013 4:50:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks, Sweet Pea; I appreciate the read and review <3
  1. Date: 10/4/2013 9:17:00 PM
    nice win..........SKAT

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet
    Date: 10/5/2013 6:23:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks, hon! :)
  1. Date: 10/2/2013 2:36:00 PM
    "Why ponder things that make no sense"... I couldn't agree more! I love that line and the entire poem! Terrific work, BP! :) Congratulations on your win!

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet
    Date: 10/3/2013 3:26:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks, SP! Congrats on BOTH your wins; that's awesome :D
  1. Date: 10/2/2013 8:26:00 AM
    finely penned poem, congrats on your win :)

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet
    Date: 10/2/2013 8:46:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks, Sanda; I appreciate it :)
  1. Date: 10/2/2013 4:56:00 AM
    Congrats on the win in the contest,

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet
    Date: 10/2/2013 5:25:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks for letting me know I placed, Doc, and thanks for the comment! :)
  1. Date: 9/13/2013 11:45:00 AM
    I been reading several of your recent poems. They are all wonderful. You are a very talented poet.

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet
    Date: 9/13/2013 11:55:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you again, Jon. These are all very old pieces that I happened upon while I was plundering the attic looking for an old VHS tape. I didn't even remember writing them. I'm happy you enjoy my work :)
  1. Date: 9/12/2013 8:41:00 PM
    If this is one of the older pieces you talked about, it shines just like the rest. Great from beginning to end. "Release relief, however brief, Let it come to crush my grief! " ALL fantastic lines

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet
    Date: 9/13/2013 10:04:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    It is one of my lost children from ages ago. I think the first four lines are good, but the last four I think are a little weaker. I really should have reworked it some. Line 5 is somewhat trite sounding and brings down the quality, I think. But something compelled me to post "as is" lol ;)
  1. Date: 9/12/2013 2:43:00 PM
    A very clever use of words......I see greatness here.

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet
    Date: 9/12/2013 3:25:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    I am deeply flattered, Wayne. Thank you for taking time to read and reply; I very much appreciate it :)