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With A Keener Edge

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With A Keener Edge

Here from the ledge
looking into the liquid silence
across the abyss of time
eye for detail is sharply seen
keen from this plateau, giving new edge
to a life spanning out
flat, as a cord
where the view is old
but, taut with new with insight

Spliced are the wires that stretch out below me
according to colors
red joined to red
blue joined to blue
some which have tangled
mixing the hues
changing the views
from where I once stood
wedged deep in the canyons
looking up

Into two directions, 
we flapped our wings, flying into a sun
running from truth
sometimes swimming with fear
often in a pool of despair

A view of the ordinary
became the exception
my eyes ever arching
to reach for the stars
by far, without reason
while seasons were passing
and strange as it seems
I learned to stop grasping
for what was unreasonable
I learned to grab on, and then to hold tight
to that which was meaningful
 
Here from the ledge
looking into the liquid silence
across the abyss of time
eye for detail is sharply seen
keen from this plateau, giving new edge
to a life spanning out
flat, as a cord
where the view is old
but, taut.... 
          or, perhaps taught........
                  with new insight




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For the contest "Know Your Place" 
Sponsored by Drake Eszes  9/10/13

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  1. Date: 9/27/2013 8:30:00 PM

    another nice winning poem... good night Carrie... xox..Linda

  1. Date: 9/25/2013 12:07:00 PM

    I can really relate well to the feelings that you expressed here, of how we see ourselves over time. I also liked the flow of the words in this poem. A very enjoyable read. Great work, Carrie! Congratulations on your win, as well!...Thank you so much for the nice comments! :)

  1. Date: 9/25/2013 8:08:00 AM

    Way to go Carrie, another excellent piece. Congrats.

  1. Date: 9/24/2013 4:50:00 PM

    An excellent approach to this contest and best one I saw yet. Congrats, Carrie.

  1. Date: 9/24/2013 12:27:00 PM

    beautiful awakening done in such an eloquent yet grounded manner... sweet congrats on your win, carrie... :) huggs

  1. Date: 9/24/2013 11:11:00 AM

    Love this Carrie, we all need to cling to the meaningful things and with life so busy we tend to forget what is important. Lovely poem and I love this imagery. Congratulations on your win ;) *hugs*

  1. Date: 9/24/2013 11:04:00 AM

    Beautiful poem, Carrie, I can see a lot of insight in your poem. Very beautiful. Congratulations on your win in Drake's contest. hugs, catie :)

  1. Date: 9/24/2013 9:52:00 AM

    another magnificent write flowing from your pen,,,,congrats on your win! :)

  1. Date: 9/24/2013 9:25:00 AM

    Congratulation, Carrie. A moving piece that grabs hold of the mind. Enjoyed it.

  1. Date: 9/24/2013 9:06:00 AM

    Carrie! This writing placed 5th in my contest. I was genuinely stunned to discover you wrote this. A great song "Ready to Fall" from one of my fav bands, Rise Against, played loudly in my head as I read this. The blend of risk & self-identity was so powerfully done. You had me good with the ending. =D

  1. Date: 9/17/2013 9:35:00 AM

    I smile approvingly. It deserves the best. I wish good luck with the contest (even though you do not need that). :) G.

  1. Date: 9/11/2013 3:08:00 PM

    Awesome! What a great poem!! Betty