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  1. Date: 9/9/2013 4:06:00 AM
    Wow...I could feel the desolation as you repeat "gone gone gone"... this hit me hard. I can relate to the solitude. I could feel a beat to this as I read it aloud. The beating of a death drum. Filled with a pulse so evidently there, but also empty and hollow sounding. You've conjured up much feelings for me on this one. Great one my friend. Always, Laura

  1. Date: 8/17/2013 10:34:00 AM
    Wow,,definitely a lyrical vibe to this kilmer and the content has an intense feel...the last stanza really hits home after gone gone gone a pyre of death upon my chest, tonight I lie down, with myself...I like those deep kind of lyrics. Always enjoy your talents peace & <3 always, cherie...

    Kilmer Avatar Stephen Kilmer
    Date: 8/17/2013 2:34:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks Cherie, i was definitely thinking about melody when I wrote this and of course funeral fires. thanks for checking in and reading my work. Peace always Kilmer
  1. Date: 8/13/2013 9:14:00 PM
    A very melancholy melody, but captivating, never the less. Have a peaceful evening :)

    Kilmer Avatar Stephen Kilmer
    Date: 8/14/2013 5:32:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    As always thanks for the comments. I am working towards writing some lyrical poems. This one kind of skirts the beginning of that process. Kilmer