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Upon Further Reflection

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Upon Further Reflection

If only not so lonely,
Perhaps then I might see:
How two are one, but when we're we
That I am you and you are me.

*Rhyme Battle 2 Contest Entry

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  1. Date: 3/22/2014 3:09:00 PM

    I'm reading Chan. Light & Love

  1. Date: 1/2/2014 1:22:00 AM

    This is a nice, pensive write. Simple, but very nice. Always, Laura

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 1/3/2014 1:37:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I appreciate the compliment, Laura :)
  1. Date: 11/30/2013 1:32:00 PM

    Really enjoyed this verse. Very deep and made me think. :) peace

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 12/1/2013 5:06:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks, Damien :)
  1. Date: 10/25/2013 5:05:00 PM

    Chan This is a deep and thought provoking write. Makes the reader reflect on life and whats important. Nice job my friend My Puppet Master poem is not really happening. So you don't have to whoop any butt. LOL but I appreciate the offer. Hugs

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/26/2013 6:49:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Many thanks and much love to you, my sweet friend :)
  1. Date: 10/6/2013 12:00:00 PM

    clever and witty. A fun poem =)

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/7/2013 10:25:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    This is one of the first I posted here, and it was brand new at the time. Glad you enjoyed, Tom. After my near death overdose back in July, I got my poetry mojo back. This is the most I've written in almost 7 years of little to no writing at all. Something about that experience jolted my brain and creativity. Thanks for the review :)
  1. Date: 9/11/2013 5:17:00 PM

    I loved this poem! Wonderful work! Adding it to my favorites! I have struggled with loneliness and self identity for awhile. How people see me on the outside, does not reflect who I am on the inside. That is what my poem "Dark Angel", is all about...Thank you for reading and commenting kindly on my poem. I really appreciate it!

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 9/11/2013 5:23:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I sincerely appreciate that, Kelly. Your poem was really cool. I love it when the imagery is so strong, I feel like I am right there, in the poem itself :)
  1. Date: 9/11/2013 6:23:00 AM

    Comments to the comments....Reason A Poteet...her comments are finally the voice of Reason (pun intended). I have read some of her work and I think she teaches literature. Her work is impeccable, like yours. Danesh and John, Oh my, they haven't a clue but thank you for trying to give them one :)

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 9/11/2013 9:32:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Check your SoupMail, my dear; my heart is bursting with happiness! :D
  1. Date: 8/29/2013 8:15:00 AM

    greetings thou you have done quite well i do believe the mistake the last poet mention about is on the third line , but when we're we . . . is not correct nor does it sound so but that's not meant to be but who are we? are two example i think adding a we ending is very hard but maybe you can think a better phase. .

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 8/29/2013 8:52:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    The contraction is supposed to mean, "but when we are we"; eliminating the contraction and using "when we are we" throws off the rhythm. I see why it's problematic, but if you read "we're" and understand it means "we are", then perhaps that will help it make more sense. Hope that clarifies. Thanks for the review! :)
  1. Date: 8/23/2013 9:03:00 PM

    Only a small part of a much larger work. It takes time not just lines. Gramaticles errors included.

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 8/24/2013 10:32:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    should say *drone on :)
    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 8/24/2013 10:31:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hi, John. If there are grammar errors in the piece, I am unaware of any, and as far as it being a small part of a larger work, I am inclined to disagree. I am a staunch believer in poetic brevity and to say what I need to say in as few lines as possible, because I do not like to let a poem ramble or drone one needlessly.
  1. Date: 8/19/2013 7:39:00 AM

    You will find the people here very nice, it is an excellent community. At times there will be drama, sometimes people's spirits can be riled after all poets tend to feel emotions with intensity. However if you offer others grace they will respond in kind. No one is expected to be perfect. I hope you enjoy. Welcome to the soup.

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 8/19/2013 8:01:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thus far, everyone has been wonderful and welcoming and I'm glad to have found a place like this :)
  1. Date: 8/17/2013 11:05:00 PM

    CONGRATS on having your poem featured this week........ Love ~ SKAT ~

  1. Date: 8/17/2013 10:08:00 PM

    Hi JTPA, . Congratulations!!! It's nice to see your poem Featured on the soups Home Page, this past week :-) goodnight~ Luv* LINDA *

  1. Date: 8/5/2013 1:13:00 PM

    Thanks again for the read and responses; I appreciate the positive feedback. I've had a lot of bad experiences on other poetry sharing sites; I hope this place is different.

  1. Date: 8/3/2013 9:18:00 PM

    awesome...SKAT

  1. Date: 8/3/2013 6:59:00 PM

    sorta like singing in an acapella choir, you're part of the group but you don't want to stand out as "overheard" -- you try to blend in for the sake of the group. I like this, Arch!

  1. Date: 8/2/2013 9:43:00 PM

    Just The A.Poet, , -A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. Dropping by to invite you to my latest contest. You will find the contest page on the top left hand side* -Looking forward in following and reading your poetry. Hope to hear from you soon. You will enjoy the community, we are one big happy family. (Drama & Love. LOL) ~ Take Care!! From: your new poet friend @-> LINDA <-@ ....

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 8/19/2013 6:35:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Much <3 to you, Linda (and everyone else, also). Thank you all for the warm welcome :)
  1. Date: 8/2/2013 8:22:00 PM

    Enjoyed your mirror image Archaic one xxx

  1. Date: 8/2/2013 12:57:00 PM

    Very warm..... when figured out.... Nice writing.... Jake

  1. Date: 8/2/2013 8:33:00 AM

    Hello new member: J.T.A.P.- Welcome to P-Soup. - Thank you for choosing to share your poems here with us. - I look forward to reading more in the future. - Have a good time and I wish you luck. - (Give and receive comments) - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)