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circle of sun - Fantasy contest

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circle of sun - Fantasy contest

Rabbit’s sitting in a circle of sun
as though they were in school
watching a hula hoop being swung by one

round and round the hoop swung
mesmerizing in its swirl being watched by the cool 
rabbit’s sitting in a circle of sun

I watched as they sat entranced in the sun
Playing silly games but always aware and nobody's fool
watching a hula hoop being swirled by one

Mother’s of the rabbits arrived at a run
food in a hamper with cold drinks for the supercool
rabbit’s sitting in a circle of sun

Chase was next on the cards “touch your on”
 was the favourite, except for the ones playing boule,
watching a hula hoop being swirled by one.

Next time your near a fairly glen
tip toe in quietly and you might see these cool
rabbit’s sitting in a circle of sun
watching a hula hoop being swirled by one


Penned 30 June 2013

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  1. Date: 7/9/2013 9:56:00 AM
    Congratulations Seren on your win with this wonderful write. I enjoyed the read~ Caryl

    Roberts Avatar Seren Roberts
    Date: 7/9/2013 10:22:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Hello Caryl, many thanks...Seren
  1. Date: 7/9/2013 8:56:00 AM
    Seren I love this little fairytale you've conveyed in your Villanelle. Congrats on your fabulous win warm Smiles, Connie

    Roberts Avatar Seren Roberts
    Date: 7/9/2013 9:11:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Connie was fun to think out
  1. Date: 7/8/2013 8:01:00 PM
    Quite the fantasy. congratulations. Love, joyce

    Roberts Avatar Seren Roberts
    Date: 7/9/2013 9:11:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Joyce ...Seren
  1. Date: 7/8/2013 3:39:00 PM
    an awesome fantasy poem... congrats :-) love LINDA

    Roberts Avatar Seren Roberts
    Date: 7/8/2013 6:58:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you Linda ...Seren
  1. Date: 7/8/2013 5:19:00 AM
    Hi Seren a super lovely poem ty for entering congrats on your win Shadow x smiles

    Roberts Avatar Seren Roberts
    Date: 7/8/2013 6:58:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you Shadow ...Seren
  1. Date: 7/2/2013 5:24:00 PM
    Nice little story going on here. Nice work soupmail.

    Roberts Avatar Seren Roberts
    Date: 7/8/2013 6:59:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Hi Wayland, thank you .....Seren
  1. Date: 6/30/2013 8:20:00 PM
    This is fantasy at its greatest my friend! You have painted a lovely image with this awesomely described Villanelle! I loved the image of the rabbits "watching a hula hoop being swirled by one" very creative part of this incredible poem! What a terrific piece, you have delighted me yet again Seren, Great Work!!

    Roberts Avatar Seren Roberts
    Date: 6/30/2013 10:45:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Just a light relief poem Russell .....Seren
  1. Date: 6/30/2013 9:36:00 AM
    How cute is this!! .......I'm trying to picture that rabbit and the hula hoop...........delightful and whimsical !!

    Roberts Avatar Seren Roberts
    Date: 6/30/2013 10:42:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Carrie just a fun piece ...Seren