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Monsters

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Monsters

Monsters sometimes find a way of getting out
Even when you thought they were locked away
Someone must of found the key you threw  out 
  
What do you do when it's one of you 
Standing, watching blood dripping in hand 
Where it came from I could not tell you ~ never tell  
I should never tell  ~  no,   not against one of us    

Though I watch the monsters dancing off the wall 
Look , their  voices scatter across the room 
Colored pills of many spilled  onto the floor 
I hear sirens screaming,  coming closer  still

Should I stand here ~  wait  to let them in

Should I run to hide myself from within 
No, I couldn't let it happen, no, not again  
I hear them knocking  on my door 
        ~ POLICE ~ ~



totally made up, 2/ 8/ 2013 11pm WED

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  1. Date: 9/17/2013 6:05:00 PM
    I can really relate to the first verse of this poem. I have those "monsters" locked inside of me, and somehow they do get out occasionally! They tend to show themselves in my poetry, which I find helps to quiet them down for awhile. Great work on this poem, Debbie, I liked it very much!...Thank you for the kind comments!

  1. Date: 6/26/2013 4:40:00 PM
    This work I liked very much, the metaphors and the twists as the piece progresses, a little dark but then again I like dark. Good work, Thumbs Up!

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 6/27/2013 12:48:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you ;}
  1. Date: 6/12/2013 11:57:00 PM
    This was very disturbing and made me think of a lunatic that sees hallucinations. You worded it in such a way to make me feel the anxiety of the psycho... a glimpse of his inner thoughts. And that one last word was like reality sinking in... great work!

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 6/13/2013 12:10:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Tim ;}
  1. Date: 6/6/2013 2:22:00 AM
    This sounds like personal demons. Multiple personalities battling with each other to gain control of a single soul and willing to do whatever it takes to win or lose. Suns rise and suns set. Moons wax and wane. Yet platitude escapes the mind of one who is not sane. And the sirens signify the end to another beginning of a vicious cycle until the ones soul is released into another plane. At least that's what I got from this poem. Thanks for sharing and making me think. Rockman

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 6/6/2013 3:30:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Wow, I wan't thinking that when I wrote it. ;}
  1. Date: 5/27/2013 11:32:00 PM
    Excellent. Very creative and unique write. Enjoyed. Tfs

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 5/29/2013 12:02:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you ;}
  1. Date: 5/27/2013 6:16:00 PM
    Nicely written and thank you for your commit.

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 5/27/2013 8:11:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    thank you Cheryl ;}
  1. Date: 5/26/2013 2:36:00 AM
    This was something else! Monsters...yes, we lock them away but they always manage to escape! I know my do! Very imaginative and trilling piece. Thanks for your visit to Dreamland's Gate and the sweet words you posted! I needed them today!

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 5/27/2013 12:59:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you for reading my words Eileen,,,,I will have to read more of your words ;}
  1. Date: 5/26/2013 1:06:00 AM
    yes, made up, but parts of it really were deep!!! Like having to do with drug addiction and stuff. Nice seeing you tonight. you are the last one and now I am out of here!!! See ya later, alligator.

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 5/27/2013 12:48:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    After while crocodile ;}
  1. Date: 5/24/2013 5:19:00 PM
    Cute one..Creative and unique work..Enjoyed reading this one..Thanks for stopping by..Sorry to hear that you had PC problems..Sara

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 5/27/2013 12:47:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you Sara ;}
  1. Date: 5/24/2013 11:11:00 AM
    - Debbie ..... hope it's just your imagination .... well written!! - Have a great weekend. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 5/24/2013 4:19:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    yes it's made up Anne ;}
  1. Date: 5/24/2013 10:21:00 AM
    i love your totally made up poetry, says alot about your imagination, also your wonderful poetry

  1. Date: 5/23/2013 11:04:00 PM
    Debbie, wow...my mind twisted in many directions... A monster a creature dancing off the wall. well I hope this horror is fiction, and the monsters in this poem, get arrested for slipping out of the box... somethings should not be reveled. It might show the true form of one... enjoyed~ Linda

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 5/24/2013 10:31:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you PD ;}
  1. Date: 5/23/2013 11:27:00 AM
    Quite powerful verse here! Hope you have a nice day! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

  1. Date: 5/23/2013 10:19:00 AM
    Just wanted to say welcome back.