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Eternity radiance

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Eternity radiance

I believe, the jewel of eternity radiance 
When the sun rays of nothingness fall on, it is brighter than the daylight
With the moon beams of renouncing, the golden silver rays floods through out
Glittering the path everyone search in everywhere
When the sun rays of nothingness fall on, it is brighter than the daylight
Serenity faces glow with the reflecting rays 
Glittering the path everyone search in everywhere
In the mountain of truth, higher than Everest if measured
Serenity faces glow with the reflecting rays
With the moon beams of renouncing, the golden silver rays floods throughout
In the mountain of truth, higher than Everest if measured
Glittering the path everyone search in everywhere
The searches souls enlighten "The Eternal Happiness"
I believe the jewel of eternity radiance.




I need to find out how I have done this. My first attempt. 

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  1. Date: 7/12/2013 6:44:00 AM

    Stupendous write my dear I believing you were channeling the soul of God here, Ghandi would be proud of you, together we stand as one, xxx love you xxx

  1. Date: 5/18/2013 6:56:00 PM

    I wrote my first Pantoum because of you. You are right it is a difficult form.

  1. Date: 5/18/2013 6:00:00 PM

    I am not familiar with this for but found it very interesting. It looks difficult, I will have to look it up to get a better understanding. I enjoyed your poem very much, I see you are a spiritual person. Continue seeking you will not end up empty handed.

  1. Date: 5/17/2013 11:59:00 PM

    Pantoum can be tricky... but I like the way the form carries out thoughts. Each line is repeated twice... the trick is making the second appearance feel like it's saying something different. I did notice, towards the end, I think the pattern got a bit jumbled... but the material itself is enchanting (maybe next time it might be easier having shorter lines). I'll be looking out for your name...

    gunatillake Avatar manel gunatillake Date: 5/18/2013 12:59:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you very encouraging.
  1. Date: 5/14/2013 9:13:00 PM

    A lovely subject for a pantoum. Did you enjoy this experience of writing a Pantoum?

    gunatillake Avatar manel gunatillake Date: 5/15/2013 12:31:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I guess so. but my verse 3 got mixed up there i should have 2 new thoughts. instead i have repeated C and D. I 'll try another one. Thank you very much. For the sight you have imparted.love and hugs
  1. Date: 5/14/2013 2:51:00 PM

    A profound poem decorated with superb language! Thank you!

    gunatillake Avatar manel gunatillake Date: 5/14/2013 3:51:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you dear Demetrios