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Blood Stains

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Blood Stains

Copper-like
Blood stains stain my small notebook
Flippin’ sick!
 
Blood stains
Drain on my piece of paper
Disturbing…
 
Dried-up blood
Spew out from my open wounds
Bloody mess!

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  1. Date: 5/2/2013 7:33:00 PM
    For me, This is excellent metaphor for how one writes from the such depth. I can almost see the blood of the writer in the ink. Great creativity

  1. Date: 5/2/2013 9:55:00 AM
    Hey, David. I like how you refer to blood as copper-like, I see it both for the reddish quality that copper and rust have, and also the metallic taste of blood.

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    Date: 5/2/2013 7:01:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Oh really, Jeremy? Awesome. Thanks a ton! :) haha wow! You're the first to appreciate the fact that I described blood as "copper-like". Have a good week and ta-ta! -DWB
  1. Date: 4/30/2013 7:52:00 AM
    Quite thought provoking-- I have journals that look like that. Well written