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Sedoka 1

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Sedoka 1

a green blade of grass
peaks through a crack
next to polished shoes

it's a big world,
are they ready
for me?



NOTE: Sedoka is a bit more obscure that tanka or haiku, but it was nonetheless very popular in it's day (even older than haiku). Basically it's a couple three-line verses. The first one is basically a haiku, describing a scene using basic nouns and simple phrasing. The second verse is supposed to describe the feelings of the poet, based on the images from the first. Originally the rules were to write them in a 5-7-7-5-7-7 syllable format (but I don't like restricting myself to those rules).

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  1. Date: 4/28/2013 7:58:00 AM
    The constraints of the form forces us to think and adds beauty to the poem. Sometimes the more restrictive the form the more beautiful the result.

    Hicks Avatar Timothy Hicks
    Date: 4/28/2013 9:02:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    But I do enjoy writing these very short poems. You have to chose your words carefully, to say what you really want to say. A minimum of words for the maximum effect... I've heard someone say once.
    Hicks Avatar Timothy Hicks
    Date: 4/28/2013 9:01:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    My philosophy is that if you write something that you like, don't discard it simply because it doesn't conform to the syllable restraints. I've noticed ever since I've stopped caring so much about those pesky syllables, my writing of haiku, tanka and sedoka have greatly improved.
  1. Date: 4/27/2013 9:16:00 PM
    Love the green blade that appears near barren ground. Thanks for the form outline......always fun to try for new expression. Always so nice to have you visit. Suz

    Hicks Avatar Timothy Hicks
    Date: 4/27/2013 10:23:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks again Suzanne. I enjoy your work for is it very different than others I've seen on this site. Your style intrigues me...
  1. Date: 4/27/2013 3:52:00 PM
    It better be ready...cause you're going to turn it upside down! :) Good one! Hugs!

    Hicks Avatar Timothy Hicks
    Date: 4/27/2013 8:58:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Haha... I love your vote of confidence!
  1. Date: 4/27/2013 7:30:00 AM
    I guess that explains your Tankas as well *lol*

    Hicks Avatar Timothy Hicks
    Date: 4/27/2013 1:27:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Haha... indeed. It's much more that a syllable counting game to me. I appreciate each and everyone of your visits...
  1. Date: 4/27/2013 3:10:00 AM
    Good one Tim. Rick

    Hicks Avatar Timothy Hicks
    Date: 4/27/2013 1:27:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Rick!