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Immortal Footsteps

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Immortal Footsteps

As a child learning to walk, I 
discovered stumbling, 
And now as an upright adult, 
I sometimes count back my previous 
steps, like the baby steps in your 
direction; 
Subconsciously, my feet always walk in 
the direction of attraction, 
And obviously spotted a winner in 
you; 
However this steady pace misread the 
time limit of your romance, 
And second place is where my feet currently 
reside;

Although a religious woman, you don’t see 
the Adam and Eve complex between us, 
Rather you underestimate my advancement 
for mere friendship, 
And at best the status of a brother; 
I realize that your soul is blind, 
And these glasses of mine would 
fit perfectly, 
But you’d rather continuously wear 
unhealthy contact lenses; 
For this reason, my passion for walking has 
come to a halt; 

I sometimes reminisce on those last five steps 
I took, 
With every inch of courage, to eliminate the 
friendzone between us, 
And yet I’ll never recall the exact value of 
footsteps post-defeat, 
Which have remained immortal over the 
years;
Friendship: such a two-faced gift, 
Heaven and Hell in one blessing. 

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  1. Date: 10/21/2014 10:05:00 AM
    Yes, I agree, Jiril, There is a bit of heaven and hell in every relationship because not one of us is perfect. So we take the good with the bad. Otherwise, I think, we would have very few relationships. We think we can fix somebody to be more like we want them to be. But, good luck with that! Only God is perfect and He accepts me just as I am. Warts and all!

    Clemons Avatar Jiril Clemons
    Date: 10/21/2014 11:12:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you, Darlene.
  1. Date: 10/12/2014 12:27:00 PM
    A well deserved feature Jiril. Really liked this one, so descriptive the emotions...Sharon G.

    Clemons Avatar Jiril Clemons
    Date: 10/12/2014 7:18:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Sharon.
  1. Date: 10/11/2014 4:39:00 AM
    Hi Jiril, Very deep poem. I'm sensing a dichotomy of philosophies of the individuals involved in the relationship. It seems to be branches off in alternate directions. Deep relationships are naturally complex. It is an interesting compelling work. Have a great day. Earl

    Clemons Avatar Jiril Clemons
    Date: 10/11/2014 7:38:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Earl.
  1. Date: 9/29/2014 8:37:00 PM
    cryptically beautiful. I had to slow down while reading and let it catch up to me... Just as I did as a baby learning to walk... Jiril, I have been away fro the soup due to hip replacement and rehab.... I'm back now and have rediscovered your work... I'll be visiting more ..... Regards.... Jake

    Clemons Avatar Jiril Clemons
    Date: 9/29/2014 8:44:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks, John. Always appreciate the love.
  1. Date: 6/8/2014 4:03:00 PM
    Well written write on a not so well written relationship. Liked this, Jiril. Thanks for stopping by and paying me a visit.

    Clemons Avatar Jiril Clemons
    Date: 6/8/2014 5:44:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you Faye. Appreciate the love.
  1. Date: 4/12/2014 6:11:00 PM
    forbidden it was forbidden it shall be take new steps to a new path..... great write.... I did enjoyed this piece indeed.... Smiles and hugs.... Gina

    Clemons Avatar Jiril Clemons
    Date: 4/12/2014 6:38:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you Gina. Appreciate the love.
  1. Date: 3/10/2014 8:22:00 AM
    Soulful and deep!! Yeah, the "friendzone" is never good, stay out of it!! Well written piece here sir!! Hey, here are three poems I think you may enjoy. "Feverish", Ur Girl" & "Ur Man".. Let me know what you think!!Asavvy1

    Clemons Avatar Jiril Clemons
    Date: 3/10/2014 2:52:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Jared. I'll check them out.
  1. Date: 3/6/2014 2:40:00 AM
    This is so touching and heartfelt..

    Clemons Avatar Jiril Clemons
    Date: 3/6/2014 4:05:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Soulful. Appreciate the love.
  1. Date: 1/8/2014 8:15:00 PM
    I agree. Feel like I''ve been there.

    Clemons Avatar Jiril Clemons
    Date: 1/8/2014 8:34:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Karen. Appreciate the love.
  1. Date: 12/4/2013 1:00:00 AM
    I like this. Tom said that he's been there. I think a lot of us have. Friendship is not a good alternative for passion, but what can you do? Bev. Great poem

    Clemons Avatar Jiril Clemons
    Date: 12/4/2013 7:03:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you Beverly. Appreciate the love.
  1. Date: 11/2/2013 11:42:00 PM
    Jiril,.:-) Congratulations on having your poem featured on the HOME PAGE.... always~ LINDA

    Clemons Avatar Jiril Clemons
    Date: 11/3/2013 8:30:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Linda, Appreciate it.
  1. Date: 10/28/2013 12:28:00 AM
    An agonizing dilemma indeed...you have clearly and cleverly expressed the feelings of the suffering soul involved in such a lop-sided relationship. I really like your poem.

    Clemons Avatar Jiril Clemons
    Date: 10/28/2013 8:13:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Leo. Appreciate the love.
  1. Date: 9/15/2013 1:31:00 PM
    Great write, and beautiful poem! -Heather

    Clemons Avatar Jiril Clemons
    Date: 9/15/2013 2:14:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Heather. Appreciate the love.
  1. Date: 9/10/2013 2:34:00 PM
    This is a really good piece of work, I like it, thanks your comments, I appreciate it

    Clemons Avatar Jiril Clemons
    Date: 9/10/2013 3:59:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks James. Appreciate the love.
  1. Date: 7/5/2013 9:02:00 PM
    Jiril, I enjoyed reading your poem. You have a unique way with words. Thank you for reading and commenting on my poem. Love, Kim

    Clemons Avatar Jiril Clemons
    Date: 7/5/2013 9:16:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Kim. Appreciate the love.
  1. Date: 7/4/2013 3:40:00 PM
    yes I too wear rose colored glasses at times. I also think some friendships are better off as friendships and not turn into lovers..... thank you for reading and liking my Pitch Perfect Dreams ,,,, happy fourth of July ;}

    Clemons Avatar Jiril Clemons
    Date: 7/4/2013 3:45:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Very true, Thanks for the response, Debbie. Happy 4th to you too.
  1. Date: 7/3/2013 9:42:00 PM
    Jiril....Which have remained immortal over the years....wow! Intense art! You write very well! Jimbo

    Clemons Avatar Jiril Clemons
    Date: 7/3/2013 10:02:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Wow James, Thank you. I'm always appreciative of poets who understand the deepness of my poems. I'm sure your just as dedicated to yours.