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Lay OFF of Me

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Lay OFF of Me

You are under his roof now...
Deny it not
You are his own comforter
Lay off of me, you stubborn child -
LEAVE ME!!
You feel perfect
When he's near...
When I appear...
You draw back in fear...
You are his property now
It's SO true - 
You are a selfish, little liar 
You burn me like flames 
You called me nasty names
Your image transformed to shame 
You witch!
I was caught under your spell...
You dwell...
IN DARKNESS...
Down you go in the abyss
You are so insidious....
Frankly, you've done enough damage
While I tried my hardest to break free
From the bondage 

You dwell in the shadows 
With the predator...
Lay off of me,

YOU total disaster

Obey your master - 
the devil...



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  1. Date: 3/20/2013 7:25:00 AM
    Intense!...and dark...excellent! It reminds me of the feel of Laura Breidenthal's work...perhaps ya'll are related?

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    Date: 3/20/2013 5:50:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    hahah oops misspelled words =- / *lifted *spirits
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    Date: 3/20/2013 5:49:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Hello good sir! Wow... thanks a bill! Yeah, I actually am related to her (I'm her sister in fact). Your comment lifteed up my spiritss and inspired me to write some more poems in thee future. xD