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  1. Date: 4/27/2013 2:36:00 AM
    You really know how to take us there, Caleb. I didn't feel as though as I was reading so much as someone was telling me a story. A very interesting tale and makes me wonder what started the fight...

  1. Date: 3/27/2013 11:52:00 AM
    Gee i didn t know what ko is..foolish me..i read andie s comment and found the answer..I reread it and i hope its a creative fiction of yours

  1. Date: 3/21/2013 11:53:00 AM
    The "naw he's fine" totally reminds me of my dad saying that same phrase (except a 'she' in there) when i was KO'd after falling of my horse down a rocky ditch..LOL awesome write, not circumstance...onto the next 1

  1. Date: 3/19/2013 8:34:00 AM
    Awesome writing, Caleb! I love the fragmented feel to this poem - like you're taking us in and out of consciousness with you. Very cool!

  1. Date: 3/18/2013 3:01:00 PM
    hahaha, I had to google KO to see what it meant!! I should have guessed knockout, but I didn't. This is really awesome. You can write about anything, Caleb!! So you had two BIG KO's, huh? Can't wait to read about the next one. Oh, and I love how you said "the concrete pillow"