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Haiku 17 - double

The small, full moment  
of love in the afternoon. 
Awkward and nuanced.
               •
Small, empty moment,
a remembrance of passion. 
My constant sadness.

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  1. Date: 2/27/2013 4:41:00 PM

    I love this double one. they both complement each other so well.

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan Date: 2/27/2013 5:21:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks. I wrote them separately, then noticed the fit.
  1. Date: 2/26/2013 11:08:00 AM

    Jack, what was and what is, I like...David

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan Date: 2/26/2013 11:12:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you for reading it and for the comment. J
  1. Date: 2/26/2013 10:07:00 AM

    Jack, these are truly excellent haikus...some of my favorite in a while. And yes, the addition of bipolar in my monoku is meant to convey the double meaning...or personalities in a haiku. Thank you for looking that far into it....Caleb

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan Date: 2/26/2013 10:25:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    It's wonderful to know a kindred spirit. Write on, my friend. Jack
  1. Date: 2/26/2013 9:46:00 AM

    Both are beautiful Jack, full of warmth and tenderness. You bring love to life in so few words.

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan Date: 2/26/2013 9:50:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you, Elizabeth. I appreciate the very nice comment. J