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Delusion of Light

Once captivated by your light that shined bright
Smooth sailing seas,  but I now resemble a shark
Your presence in times of sorrow, once a delight

Again I move through the cold, this is my plight
A weary werewolf under dark moon, not a lark
Once captivated by your light that shined bright

Freezing wind blowing I move from left to right
The bitter bite foreshadowed by a familiar  bark
Your presence in times of sorrow, once a delight

Confusion sets in and now, insanity with insight
This thing threatens, but I’m obligated to hark
Once captivated by your light that shined bright

Weak in soul, but my mind feels a strange might
The pleasant placating voice has to now embark
Your presence in times of sorrow, once a delight

If it’s a phase, I promise it is not done from spite 
This clever close alliterated, a remaining remark
Once captivated by your light that shined bright
Your presence in times of sorrow, once a delight


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  1. Date: 2/24/2013 5:18:00 AM

    tough for that you have done but excellent work Wayland..well, cam to thank you again..just want to tell you that sometimes the soup's syllable counter is not reliable so i check my syllables on Howmanysyllables.com..are you new? haven't seen you around , if you are new, then a hearty welcome to the PS family..

    bunch Avatar wayland bunch Date: 2/24/2013 6:40:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Yes I'm fairly new. I think tomorrow is my two moth anniversary if I was counting. I'm really not, I just know that I started on christmas day lol. How sad is that, but it's my present to all of you hahaha, that's a joke.
  1. Date: 2/23/2013 9:27:00 AM

    I love the villanelle form- it is my favorite! I have only attempted it once, this inspires me to give it another go! Very well done :)

    bunch Avatar wayland bunch Date: 2/24/2013 2:52:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I didn't notice until further inspection that you had attempted the villanelle on your poem that is currently the oldest posted. Was that your first poem for the Soup?
  1. Date: 2/17/2013 9:05:00 PM

    About your poem: I call this delusions of light** this may be your subconscious acting suspicious over the feeling you have or had. I love the deep mental state in which is hidden in the dark flaw shadows around sorrow. I love this level in which love creates the delusion of a captivated soul. One can still live in this the spiritual light in which appears to be only a sorrowful delusion now under control. always~ PD

    bunch Avatar wayland bunch Date: 2/17/2013 10:33:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Ah another recommendation that I will accept, I now too call it delusions of light, lol. Thanks for your lovely comments.
  1. Date: 2/17/2013 8:54:00 PM

    Wayland, making my way here on the soup tonight.. happy to say, it make me happy to know that you have not deleted the top 2 poems you told me about. First I will re-read this poem. I took a peak yesterday from my phone.... PD