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Eyewitnesses

ponds fountain      aired water       fishes' breath 

sounds vanish      silence rules       water moves 

drowned thoughts flow     space for minds      emptiness 

fishes float      down below     looking up 

spectators     on the shore     looking down

sharing worlds     land unites     with water 

fishes' view      men's vision     worlds unite 


((Set of ?) Monoku for the Ellip contest of Gingo.. 

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  1. Date: 3/7/2013 1:16:00 PM

    belated congrats on your win...David

  1. Date: 3/5/2013 7:51:00 AM

    I love your eye witness acount of this scene..you brought it to life in my mind with your words. Enjoyed !! Congrats on your placement in the contest !!

  1. Date: 3/5/2013 7:31:00 AM

    Terrific last set! congrats on your win. BG

  1. Date: 3/5/2013 5:39:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win with this wonderful ellip! Lori

  1. Date: 3/5/2013 2:00:00 AM

    Congrats on your HM Ellie, I am envious of all those that tried this and placed xx

  1. Date: 3/4/2013 12:08:00 PM

    Congratulations on a fine win, Ellie. Annalise

  1. Date: 3/4/2013 10:11:00 AM

    Ellie, this is a very nice and awesome win... always~ LINDA

  1. Date: 3/4/2013 7:09:00 AM

    Congrats on your win. Connie

  1. Date: 3/1/2013 11:00:00 AM

    !!!

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  1. Date: 2/20/2013 10:26:00 PM

    wow, you went ALL OUT on this contest. I think you did more examples of this form than anybody else and came up with an entire cohesive poem composed of these ellips. Good luck in the contest. Mine is so short, just one line across! It will be interesting to know what he is looking for!