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In a Hotel Room

Sitting alone in room two-sixty-nine
With a king sized bed, it will do just fine 
Shivering, I pull my robe a little tighter 
Glance at the clock for the millionth time 

Had a nice long soak in the Jacuzzi tub
The steam filled the room with thoughts of love 
Slipped into something real sexy-sweet     
In raspberry satin… a tasty treat  

The music is playing, all soft and low
The candles are burning a scented glow 
The transformation was well worth a try
This hotel room is now a paradise 

The warm oil waits on the bedside table 
For this gal is more than willing and able 
Champagne on ice is waiting for two 
To drink a toast to what we’re about to do 

The knock on the door makes my heart skip a beat
He really is here, no time for cold feet  
A man who deserves to be treated so fine 
This truly wonderful husband of mine


2/7/2013 ~ For Black Eyed Susan’s contest “In a Hotel Room” 
I wanted to take your mind one direction and have a surprise ending... 




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  1. Date: 4/20/2013 11:35:00 PM

    Sexy Becca, very well done, Love the ending,What a good wife : )

  1. Date: 2/21/2013 11:08:00 AM

    The room will gonna be a very romantic and lovely place indeed. Wow! I extremely love and have enjoyed reading this winning piece of yours my dear friend Becca. Big hearty congratulations to your well deserved win! My hearty congratulations too for your other recent wins! love and hugs, Leonora

  1. Date: 2/20/2013 6:14:00 PM

    Congratulations! another winner Becca.

  1. Date: 2/20/2013 3:54:00 PM

    Wonderful job Becca ..congratulations

  1. Date: 2/20/2013 10:17:00 AM

    congrats on your win, a very romantic take on the theme and I like the two different endings :)

  1. Date: 2/20/2013 8:52:00 AM

    Really a romantic piece Becca, Congrats on your big win :D, enjoyed to read this one :D - hug, yanny

  1. Date: 2/20/2013 3:28:00 AM

    Beautiful written.......... I LIKE the picture the words paint when landing inside of me.. :+)

  1. Date: 2/20/2013 1:50:00 AM

    Many Congratulations on your win Becca, sorry i am a bit late xx

  1. Date: 2/20/2013 1:29:00 AM

    Good job! - Your hotel is 7 star! - Congratulations! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

  1. Date: 2/19/2013 8:27:00 PM

    Yes, I DO remember this one, sweetie, and I am glad to see it among the top three wins. Congratulations. You deserve it.

  1. Date: 2/19/2013 5:22:00 PM

    Congrats Becca on your big win, great poem xxx

  1. Date: 2/19/2013 4:48:00 PM

    Husbands deserve a little romance too. Congratulations on your win. L0ve, Joyce

  1. Date: 2/19/2013 4:12:00 PM

    Becca, CONGRATULATIONS :-) ~ love your awesome winning poem in Susan's contest.. take care.. PD

  1. Date: 2/19/2013 2:57:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win, Becca! Hard to decide which ending I liked better, maybe something in-between and ambiguous. Cheers, Roy

  1. Date: 2/19/2013 12:35:00 PM

    congrats on a wonderful win. Becca

  1. Date: 2/19/2013 9:52:00 AM

    LOL--We were waiting for something more naughty, but this is better! Love it!

  1. Date: 2/19/2013 7:33:00 AM

    Becca congrats on your win. Much deserved. Connie

  1. Date: 2/16/2013 9:59:00 PM

    Because I know what you look like...My imagination is all that's left to finalize this subtle sensual TEASE...hubby is a lucky Dude!!! Brilliantly DONE!!!

  1. Date: 2/15/2013 10:54:00 PM

    SWEET SWEET SWEET, I just love this one and it works as a valentine poem too!!! by the way, I have no generous beau like my poem spoke of. I just enjoy writing fantasy. Luv, Andrea

  1. Date: 2/14/2013 11:42:00 AM

    Becca, I really love your poem, how romantic, happy valentines day, love debra

  1. Date: 2/12/2013 6:22:00 AM

    Hi, WOWwwwww this I love!!!!!! Beautiful I'm jealous I want to write one as good as this :) I will read all your poems :)))))))) Tc, Ali

  1. Date: 2/11/2013 3:03:00 PM

    Sounds like a definite winner... and possibly in the contest, too.

  1. Date: 2/11/2013 11:54:00 AM

    A wonderful romance of words. Setting the scene, letting thoughts run through my mind of who is the man. I liked it you left me wondering until your very last line. Great Valentine poem Becca. Warm Smiles, Connie

  1. Date: 2/11/2013 8:04:00 AM

    Becca, love this, an excellent write and a lucky man, good luck....David

  1. Date: 2/11/2013 3:59:00 AM

    beautiful and sensual.Im sure your husband would love it:)..And yep the title gave me anorher direction far from the ending ..Awesome:)

  1. Date: 2/9/2013 2:59:00 PM

    O, You have done one on this..Awesome .. done well to keep the reader's interest aroused till the end, which was unexpected. great work!! Jag

  1. Date: 2/8/2013 2:00:00 PM

    love the honeymoon scene.. poetry in motion. you got my interest to the end..

  1. Date: 2/8/2013 9:41:00 AM

    not surprising at all Becca, your poetry is wonderful and so is the ending

  1. Date: 2/7/2013 4:25:00 PM

    Sounds like a perfect evening! I enjoyed your poem but probably not as much as you enjoyed the room.

  1. Date: 2/7/2013 12:35:00 PM

    u surprised us ,,, thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest...

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