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  1. Date: 3/9/2013 7:17:00 PM
    A very nice tale of childhood. The descriptions are all encompassing and easy to visualize! I believe this form of poetry is called a haibun, a blend of prose and haiku. I really enjoy how you use each word to it's full effectiveness to where it's clean and concise. Very well penned, Debbie!

  1. Date: 2/2/2013 10:28:00 AM
    I love this poem of young love. Wonderful!

  1. Date: 2/1/2013 11:43:00 AM
    I love this story and when you got around to the little love story part, so darling, Debs. I especially like how you did your second haiku. Awesome.

  1. Date: 2/1/2013 9:44:00 AM
    What a beautiful picture you posted here. I delight in reading your work. Jancarl

  1. Date: 2/1/2013 9:13:00 AM
    What a charming memory this is.....(I still have a memory of a kiss on the school bus...from my first-grade crush)!! Isn't it amazing how intense love at such a young age can be? Love this charmer.......a delightful trip down memory lane!

  1. Date: 1/31/2013 3:48:00 PM
    A question. So a haibun has no regulated length? I can write as many verses as I want? I could include mulitple haiku? Now THAT, to me, the ever-wordy, is truly cool. We managed to get a lift home! Yeah! And I may have made a new friend :) We are talking of trying to start a book club. My suggestion was a book of short stories published by one of the local authors... easier to find time, small blocks... I'm quite excited. One Sunday every six weeks. I SHOULD be able to swing that. a happy Dee

  1. Date: 1/31/2013 11:12:00 AM
    Oh, made me smile and remember, too! Cause you're a dot the "i" person, as well, in the last stanza, "as" my seat, "lace"(? I think) my new...and (I think), sparkled, "an" irish... I especially liked "wishing he would kiss me" oh, I so remember those first stirrings! So innocent, romantic... the heart pounding, the fear... sent you a soupie and will erace this tomorrow. ;-) xox Dee

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    Date: 1/31/2013 2:00:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    OK to leave it Dee I appreciate it when I get to make corrections!
  1. Date: 1/31/2013 8:52:00 AM
    ah... Youth! an excellent haibun. Hugs, catie :)

  1. Date: 1/31/2013 7:17:00 AM
    This is so sweet, Debbie. I'm so glad you introduced Haibun to us. It seems to be the perfect poetic form for recalling fond memories. It's sad to think that, nowadays, kids probably spend their "snow days" playing videogames and watching TV! I thoroughly enjoyed reading this :)

  1. Date: 1/30/2013 7:16:00 PM
    No finer example of what you need for your contest is this nostalgic delight Deb. The love poems l wrote came to me, but l would have to put some time into creating one of these and watching my granddaughter doesn't afford me much spare time. This one of your is truly excellent! Thanks for you comment.

  1. Date: 1/30/2013 3:01:00 PM
    Sweet Nostalgia dear ma.TnksGod for those days..and for your Tommy boy :)i.I resd all.your haiku too.Magnificent.

  1. Date: 1/30/2013 9:09:00 AM
    I love reading your poem and thank alot for what you said about my poems but when you said about form what do I need to write down when I said I don't know can you help me I'm new at this kirt my email is thank you kirt

  1. Date: 1/30/2013 12:29:00 AM
    Well written ...enjoyed reading ...It was really exciting to work for your contest....thanks for the different concept...lots of love, Mehnaz

  1. Date: 1/29/2013 7:32:00 PM
    Oh, I so enjoyed your wonderful memories that you share, Debbie. Awesome verse as if you took us there and we experience the whole thing with you!

  1. Date: 1/29/2013 5:54:00 PM
    Enjoyed your wonderful verse Debbie, love Elizabeth

  1. Date: 1/29/2013 5:18:00 PM
    Beautiful memories Debbie, too bad you can't flash back in time and pucker up for your Irish Lad, I thoroughly enjoyed this verse, and I can imagine you there, all googly eyed and beautiful, such precious memories needed to be shared, love xxx