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Rain Song

You played me like a violin
I can't believe I fell again
But clouds revealed the moon, and I was shaken
Your eyes were closed
Your words were spare
You ran your fingers through my hair
But from your whispered breath, dark lies were spoken,
  
The moon betrayed me, .......a storm is waking.......
The moon betrayed me........ a storm is breaking.......

Those empty words that still resound
pound in my head and I have found
Your love was like a tunnel going nowhere -
I crossed a bridge
And took a risk, 
I fell right in,
But couldn't swim 
The drowning rush surrounds me like a river

I dived in it........I can't deny it
I survived it........to cry a river

You came to me without a plan
I should have known that it would end
The echo of the thunder tried to warn me
A distant voice
Inside my head
A cloud appeared with laden air
And pulled me where the heart's a frozen ember

I see the lightning......  I am frightened
I hear the plunder....    of wretched thunder

I hear it now, the pouring rain
It beats against the window pane
And now the chill just sends a quiver through me
Storms only come
When I'm alone
Torrential songs are drowning me 
A broken heart can't stop the rain from coming in

Where hearts are broken.......rain has spoken
Where hearts are broken.......rain has spoken




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Written to the music of "Hallelujah" for Frank's Contest 1/24/13

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  1. Date: 2/14/2013 11:35:00 PM

    Congratulations on another very fine win, dear Carrie! Love, Annalise

  1. Date: 2/14/2013 8:11:00 PM

    This is a hit for sure! Who can we get to record it? Congratulations! RAY

  1. Date: 2/12/2013 4:45:00 PM

    Carrie, you are so talented. I love reading your poetry. This is another fine win for you and a deserving one too. Loved this and could imagine it being sung to a country tune. Congratulations on your win!

  1. Date: 2/11/2013 10:29:00 PM

    Such a fine write with great imagery, glad that you scored, congrats!! Jag

  1. Date: 2/11/2013 3:36:00 PM

    Oh, Carrie, so creative you are! Awesome rendition here. Congratulations on your win in Frank's contest. love and hugs, Catie :)

  1. Date: 2/11/2013 12:17:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win, Carrie.

  1. Date: 2/11/2013 10:51:00 AM

    This is amazingly beautiful lyric my dear Carrie! Big congrats on your big win! love/hugs, LG

  1. Date: 2/11/2013 9:29:00 AM

    Good morning Carrie.. Congrats!!! :-) on your winning poem. *Always~PD

  1. Date: 2/11/2013 8:38:00 AM

    Rains of a broken heart...excellently worded. Congrats on your win !!

  1. Date: 1/24/2013 8:35:00 PM

    This was perfectly crafted for the contest!! I love it, flows quite gracefully my dear poet friend :)

  1. Date: 1/24/2013 5:49:00 PM

    Awesome!! A sure winner, this is, Carrie. No need to wish you luck here. Enjoyed singing your choice words to "Hallejujah"... Great job! Love, Annalise