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1944

Today is my birthday; sixty-eight in words. 
They mean less now 
than when numbers were the cold, hard play of my youth; 
I could make them dance in my head. 

No rule says I can't still dance, 
feel the power of the machine in my skull,
though it runs differently now, 
balancing carefully, 
not falling left or right,
keeping heel to toe.

I'll fall when I'm ready: 
forward, face-down 
on the razor's edge. 

But it's my birthday and I'm on the new side of midnight.
I'm tired, ready to find an edge to sleep on. 
I do talk of edges.

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  1. Date: 2/3/2013 10:27:00 AM

    Jack, this poem(for me -- only my amateur opinion)is a good example of the hybridization of 'free verse' (or open verse), and prose(not so much in the structure of prose, but the 'voice'). This creates an effect that I enjoy trying to employ, and also read in the poetry of others.

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan Date: 2/3/2013 10:32:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks. It came from a long "stream of consciousness" paragraph, so it began it's life as prosed, morphing into something else.
  1. Date: 1/25/2013 2:17:00 PM

    I like this Jack,,, I will be reading more of yours. Thank you for reading my "missing Pieces" and thank you for understanding it was about the writing on the wall "not me" ;} you have a blessed day. and keep writing ;}