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Rendezvous

Lying on my back looking up at the sky
I don’t have to close my eyes
Gray clouds are blocking the few rays of sun
which are trying to peek at me on this beautiful day in Autumn
The structure looming near me takes my breath away
Oh, what little breath I have left on this incredible day
A thousand foot tall iron edifice weighing ten thousand tons 
makes me feel so small, so vulnerable…
I’m overcome

I feel the blanket under me, I caress it with bare feet
The emotion of this moment… my journey will be complete
This is a fantasy come true
waiting for this rendezvous...
With this man, my heart and soul I’ve shared
Why then, do I feel so unprepared?
I look around at the people walking by, 
speaking words I barely recognize ...
I close my eyes

A cool breeze blows gently across my skin…
A loose strand of hair tickles my face as it blows with the wind… 
A shadow falls over me, I feel his touch 
The one I’ve been longing for so much 
He brushes the hair from my eyes… then lingers,
touching my lips with his fingers
His handsome face, his dark eyes, looking down at me
“Bonjour ma chérie… bienvenue à Paris”...
I can’t breathe <3


1/21/2013 ~ For Mystic Rose's Fantasy contest ~ 
4th place mention... I think I had the wrong idea of "fantasy" heh ~  Thank you for the lovely comments ~  In case you still don't know the thousand foot tall edifice to which I refer, there's a picture if you click on About This Poem above the title ;)

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  1. Date: 4/20/2013 3:08:00 PM

    Haha, your ending caught me off guard. Now I understand what edifice you were talking about. I always thought rendezvous was one word? In any case this was delightful to read. I felt the same (minus the accent) when I was in Salisbury Cathedral... really was hard to believe I was even there, yet I have pictures to prove it!

    Lucas Avatar Becca Lucas Date: 4/21/2013 8:25:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Oh you're right! It's hyphenated in French, thanks!! can I see pics? :)
  1. Date: 3/4/2013 11:28:00 AM

    Hi Becca! I read your blog and I had those thoughts in mind as well, it sure gave me additional insight to those forms--- I agree with the others here and think this is free verse-- I think adding in some rhyme can be nice in free verse as well-- as I read this, I felt the emotions here, the anticipation, and how you ended this-- ah, made me smile ;) -- btw I couldn't help but smile as I saw your favorite bands-- will post something here (hopefully! soon)--hmm might re-post something here now

    Lucas Avatar Becca Lucas Date: 3/4/2013 12:08:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hey! I'm so glad to hear from you!! Thanks for your comments, ... I'm glad it made you smile :) and yes! post, post, and re-post... :D
  1. Date: 3/4/2013 10:36:00 AM

    Yes, Becca, this is clearly free verse. It is difficult to distinguish between some of the forms of poetry, but in my humble opinion, this IS free verse. Hugs, catie :)

    Lucas Avatar Becca Lucas Date: 3/4/2013 11:13:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you for having a look, Catie :)
  1. Date: 3/4/2013 10:34:00 AM

    Very nice, Rebecca! It smells like free verse. (It's not narrative, may be a monologue, definitely not a Prose poem).

    Lucas Avatar Becca Lucas Date: 3/4/2013 11:13:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks Ruben!
  1. Date: 2/16/2013 8:30:00 PM

    hey, I see this favorite one of mine that you wrote also won in the contest. BIG congrats. you deserved it. Glad you like the swap quatrain form. I am thinking of doing a contest on it sometime.

  1. Date: 2/1/2013 7:07:00 PM

    I like how well you held back the final denouement, and your skillful phrasing and imagery. Well done Becca! Best wishes, Keith

  1. Date: 1/26/2013 5:04:00 PM

    Hi Becca, :-) Congrats in Mystic's "FANTASY FANTASY FANTASY" fun contest... God Bless*LINDA

  1. Date: 1/24/2013 11:03:00 PM

    I love this! SENSUALLY UNDERSTATED... make so the reader can choose the mysteriously delicious flavor...I simply close my eyes and imagine a Beautiful Redhead. The delicious taste of Cinnamon does it for me every time....

  1. Date: 1/24/2013 2:56:00 PM

    Ah yes a romantic fantasy! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

  1. Date: 1/24/2013 1:00:00 PM

    Congrats on your win

  1. Date: 1/24/2013 12:34:00 PM

    A fantasy come true... Perfect.

  1. Date: 1/24/2013 11:39:00 AM

    In our dreams and fantasies anything is possible...so loved this poem. Congrats !!

  1. Date: 1/24/2013 10:07:00 AM

    Ahh I love this one!! I loved finding out at the end that you were describing the Eiffel Tower at the beginning :) Faved. And congrats!

  1. Date: 1/23/2013 7:08:00 PM

    congrats on your win Becca

  1. Date: 1/23/2013 2:15:00 PM

    Revisiting right from across the skies to savour its beauty once again! Jag

  1. Date: 1/22/2013 10:59:00 PM

    seeing this one again. It's one of your very best!!

  1. Date: 1/22/2013 9:55:00 PM

    Wow, what a fantasy you have conjured up with this incredible write Becca! I truly enjoyed reading this delightful poem this evening! Thank you for your wonderful comment on my poem! What a tremendous piece this one is, Great Work!!

  1. Date: 1/22/2013 11:54:00 AM

    Ah Becca I just love Paris and I adore this wonderful picture you have painted, good luck...David

  1. Date: 1/22/2013 7:05:00 AM

    loving it...

  1. Date: 1/22/2013 5:46:00 AM

    love your fantasy, Becca,, but it reads so real,, and very beautiful...

  1. Date: 1/21/2013 11:39:00 PM

    Yes, now THIS is MY idea of a fantasy. LOVe it. It reminds me of one I did about falling in love with a Paris man a long time ago. This one ought to do really well in the contest.

  1. Date: 1/21/2013 9:40:00 PM

    I think this will do very well. I enjoyed this fantasy.

  1. Date: 1/21/2013 5:32:00 PM

    Such a romantic fantasy !! Enjoyed !!

  1. Date: 1/21/2013 5:09:00 PM

    A highly romantic fantasy, well done, a little disappointed that it ended too soon, Becca :) soupmail !! Jag

  1. Date: 1/21/2013 4:33:00 PM

    I have to giggle a bit on this one, you had me fantasizing right along with you. Awesome poem. hugs, catie :)

    Lucas Avatar Becca Lucas Date: 1/21/2013 5:08:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Haha :D Thank you, that's a great compliment! hugs :)