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We All Fall Down

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We All Fall Down

Both of us were damaged yet, we tried
literal broken lines.
He was right winged and I was left winged,
I hid under his, we lifted with mine.

Both of us were needy flights, wing singed
like Icarus we fell down
I was left winged and he was right winged
I lifted him and yet he held me down.

Both of us were novices at love,
pigeons with tried, tired roles.  
He was right winged and I was left winged, 
his sheltering wing took such a toll.

Both of us were desperate for love
so, we nested for some long time.
I was left winged and he was right winged
yet, down we fell, when we wished to climb.


*Dedicated to all the damaged ones who tried.

 


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  1. Date: 1/15/2013 9:10:00 AM

    Debbie, :-) Congratulations in Suzette's " ZaniLa Rhyme - an exiting new contest for the holidays... " contest. Take care... PD

  1. Date: 1/13/2013 1:26:00 PM

    Creative winning work..Congrats on top of the list work...Sara

  1. Date: 1/12/2013 5:57:00 PM

    Well done congrats....Seren

  1. Date: 1/12/2013 5:10:00 PM

    Wow cher...VERY nicely done and so well put together too...We gain much wisdom and insight from these damaging experiences, no? - Tim

    Ryerson Avatar Tim Ryerson Date: 1/12/2013 5:11:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    And congratulations too, of course!
  1. Date: 1/12/2013 5:09:00 PM

    Beautiful! Congratulations on your wonderful win, Deb! Love, Annalise

  1. Date: 1/12/2013 2:08:00 PM

    deep. So many layers I get reading this. Seems a good relationship that didn't endure and left a permanent mark. Very good verse!

  1. Date: 1/12/2013 1:29:00 PM

    Always the talented view from around the corner of life---which is what makes you a special talent Deb--congrats

  1. Date: 1/12/2013 11:50:00 AM

    Proud to share honors with you. Creative poem you entered. Congratulations. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 1/12/2013 11:36:00 AM

    Deb, very nice~SKAT

  1. Date: 1/12/2013 10:39:00 AM

    Excellent write on a subject that I'm sure touches many lives. How sad that one should feel even the need to hold another down. Congrats on your winning spot !! Well written and thought our poem.

  1. Date: 1/12/2013 9:59:00 AM

    Another excellent piece, it made me think of my Mom and Dad and how my Dad prevented my Mom from flying. Very touching, congratulations on win.

  1. Date: 1/12/2013 9:55:00 AM

    Love the tie-in to Icarus and the wings theme. Congratulations on the win, well-deserved.

  1. Date: 1/12/2013 7:44:00 AM

    Congratulations on your winning spot once again Debbie xx

  1. Date: 1/12/2013 6:49:00 AM

    Wonderful piece,nice dedication,Debbie...Congratulations on your superb win...

  1. Date: 1/12/2013 5:45:00 AM

    congrats on your win....best wishes

  1. Date: 1/12/2013 4:49:00 AM

    A valid lesson here: When we are both "broken", we cannot sustain the momentum to lift the other (let alone ourselves). I loved the fact that you were bold enough to employ Identical Rhyme in line 3. Congratulations on your third place win, Debbie. Best wishes, Suzette

  1. Date: 1/8/2013 12:13:00 PM

    What a great poem this is. Thanks for sharing it with us today. God bless you always. Lucilla

  1. Date: 1/8/2013 7:56:00 AM

    I can relate to this poem for so many reasons...; ) Beautifully penned, Deborah. Ruben.

  1. Date: 1/7/2013 7:26:00 PM

    nicely penned ...thanks for stopping by...best wishes

  1. Date: 1/7/2013 11:39:00 AM

    Hi Debbie great love it, all the best Owen

  1. Date: 1/7/2013 7:31:00 AM

    Very insightful Debbie. loved reading this one. many thanks for your inspiring comments at my pages. I won't be able to keep up with soup for at least a week. Will catch up later dear.

  1. Date: 1/7/2013 7:25:00 AM

    The best poems I've read are those that come from the hart and into the soul. Your poem has don just that. We're powerful Deb. Warm Smiles, Connie

  1. Date: 1/7/2013 7:17:00 AM

    Love this Debbie you inspire me such a lot. And thanks for checking out my stuff xx

  1. Date: 1/7/2013 5:02:00 AM

    They said "it's better try then fail than not try at all". I am cheering for all who though with "singed wing" still continue trying. Great poem, Debbie. Love ya, Toquyen

  1. Date: 1/7/2013 3:33:00 AM

    Love the way you penned this Debbie,,, you have an awesome day ;}

  1. Date: 1/7/2013 1:47:00 AM

    I would like to capture this one for myself dear Debbie. I love this and it speaks to me and of me. One love. Joy Wells

  1. Date: 1/7/2013 12:37:00 AM

    Thank your for the questions left on my poem, Lonely. I have soupmailed you and I hope that this answers your questions. I have covered the topic regarding internal rhymes and other rhymes, on my fb page, Water Dance, some time ago - if you would like to read it. I had removed the blog here on soup after some remark or other.... Now forgotten and let us move on. Love, Su

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards Date: 1/7/2013 3:25:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    An example by the poet who had designed the ZaniLa Poetry form: http://thepoetsgarret.com/2010Challenge/form4.html
    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards Date: 1/7/2013 3:17:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Blog: Date Posted: 12/15/2012 3:11:00 PM ZaniLa RHYME - a new contest for the holiday period
  1. Date: 1/6/2013 11:32:00 PM

    So true and so good. Email.

  1. Date: 1/6/2013 8:33:00 PM

    this is amazing Deb, the structure of the poem fits the story, and the flow.. and the theme well brilliant....

  1. Date: 1/6/2013 7:07:00 PM

    Debbie, the form and structure of your beautiful poem is only exceeded by the wisdom of its message..... Love Ya ..... Jake

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