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In Shadows, Unseen

Passionate hearts and intentions
Linger in shadows, unseen
Hidden from the illumination  
Of drama performed by a queen

Like the sweet song of a bluebird
As the storm carries on all around 
No one can hear the beautiful voice
Overpowered by the thunderous sound

When the sun sets over the ocean
Where waves are crashing to shore 
The beauty’s not seen by those people
Who prefer the waves even more 

The calming effect of a candle
Near a blazing fire untamed 
Won’t be noticed by many observers
When distracted by raging flames 

The subtle scent of real roses
Or a bouquet of lavender plumes
Will always be overpowered 
By the smell of a strong perfume

Words which might have been helpful
Or a blessing to someone in need 
Are drowned out by superficial sentiments
Destroyed by words which impede

Thoughts which would have deeper meaning 
So few now will easily glean
Discouragement leaves hearts silent 
And they linger in shadows, unseen

1/1/2013  Dedicated to invisible people everywhere

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  1. Date: 4/2/2013 12:22:00 AM

    You are so very "seen" Becca, for your Beautiful and insightful poetry. another great write, Big hugs

  1. Date: 3/16/2013 2:41:00 PM

    Such lovely scents and sounds, they do linger after we leave and enter remember land, Becca, nice.

  1. Date: 3/10/2013 11:04:00 AM

    Good morning, BECCA ;-) Congratulations on having your poem featured this week. Have yourself a nice and sweet Sunday. ~Always & Forever *LINDA

  1. Date: 3/5/2013 10:15:00 PM

    I enjoy the vivid colors in this piece, nice write.

  1. Date: 3/5/2013 7:17:00 PM

    Nice poem!! Really enjoyed the read!

  1. Date: 2/18/2013 6:34:00 PM

    This is the first of yours I've read Becca, am truly impressed with this, wonderful message and beautiful read

  1. Date: 2/7/2013 6:12:00 AM

    amazing poetry Becca, never have i seen, so many comments on a poets page, especially one so new here,, but the poem demands that much respect, and so dp you

  1. Date: 1/29/2013 11:42:00 AM

    yes !! It's the people that talk the most and shout the loudest that mostly have the least to say.. and the subtleties hold so much of the true beauty in this world..thank goodness not everyone sees that or we may lose that sense of having something special, delicate.. I love it.. thanks..

  1. Date: 1/13/2013 5:56:00 PM

    Awww Becca point taken! and if you want actual critiques it would be my pleasure ;), i saw you mentioned not really wanting 'fluffy comments'. Ok here's your critique, you can write in meter!! HUZZAH!! you have rhythm! you've used similes, metaphor & allitation..me thinks ye be a poet!! ;) Light & Love

    Lucas Avatar Becca Lucas Date: 1/14/2013 7:40:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Don't get me wrong, I LOVE the fluffy comments! lol But hey, I like your critique here :) thanks Debbie!
  1. Date: 1/13/2013 9:51:00 AM

    Powerful images coupled with poetic beauty! Thank you

  1. Date: 1/10/2013 9:32:00 PM

    such a nice piece... I see people without voices, I see muted cries, I see patience waiting for the right moment to shine...thanks ....what a talent.

  1. Date: 1/10/2013 8:45:00 PM

    Love the rhythm you balance it well here, enjoyed your poetry tonight, we are lucky to have you here Becca, have a good night, xxx

  1. Date: 1/10/2013 6:07:00 PM

    yes, I remember this and am glad you did not delete it. I couldn't tell from your blog, Becca. Did you not save your poems when you deleted them? I sure hope you still have them!!!

  1. Date: 1/10/2013 5:36:00 PM

    I am aware something happened but I don't need to know what it was. I just know that this poem proves your worth and I hope I read more from you. This is a very nice place for the most part. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 1/10/2013 2:09:00 PM

    Find your candle within the shadows, dare to let it shine brightly !! These verses speak so clearly from a heart tender. Lovely poetry my dear !! Peace and Light !!

  1. Date: 1/10/2013 1:36:00 PM

    I like this poem. I like how you have highlighted the overlooked people of society. Good write - JH

  1. Date: 1/10/2013 1:15:00 PM

    I am very pleased that you are back and not silenced by the white noise. Great poem and the message is very topical. Going on my fav list :-) Love, su

  1. Date: 1/10/2013 12:55:00 PM

    Hey what happened to all your poems??? I just lost a bunch of my favorites!

  1. Date: 1/10/2013 11:58:00 AM

    love this write the flow and the pattern welcome to soup also thankyou for comments on minexxdavidscott

  1. Date: 1/10/2013 3:27:00 AM

    Please, share all your poems with us.

  1. Date: 1/9/2013 1:57:00 PM

    Becca....poets are easily hurt.....I know....sometimes you just wanna say "scroo'im" ....but.....let your pen express your heart, like always..... never surrender! never retreat! jimbo

  1. Date: 1/9/2013 12:48:00 PM

    Hey! I can't send you a Soup Mail!! Grrrr!!! I promise, it wont be a hateful one! : )

    O. Avatar Ruben O. Date: 1/9/2013 1:57:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    A sent you a Soup Mail..finally! : )
    O. Avatar Ruben O. Date: 1/9/2013 1:30:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Well...you did something... The little envelope with the cup of tea that used to be next to your name is not there...I can't send you a Soup Mail without it. Im going to try to re-send an old S.Mail.
    Lucas Avatar Becca Lucas Date: 1/9/2013 1:13:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I don't know why you can't.... I didn't block you or anything...
  1. Date: 1/9/2013 11:28:00 AM

    soup mail...

  1. Date: 1/9/2013 8:44:00 AM

    Becca, I think you stay on the soup and keep shining the way you do. Love, Gail

    Lucas Avatar Becca Lucas Date: 1/9/2013 11:37:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you Gail :) hugs
  1. Date: 1/9/2013 6:18:00 AM

    Becca, such a great poem! I just read Frank's blog, and I too am upset. And now I am worried. Did my rhyme blog come across wrong??? Oh DEAR!! I too love rhyme and I put up the blog because I wanted to share how I squeeze in rhyme even in forms that are not rhyme based! I hope you know that your poems and personality have so been enjoyed here. You are delightful! If you need a break from the drama and nitpicking, I understand. But I do hope you return, as some have. You are a real sweetie!

    Lucas Avatar Becca Lucas Date: 1/9/2013 11:37:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you Cyndi, and I promise you have done nothing that came across wrong, I love your blogs. :) thanks Cyndi
  1. Date: 1/9/2013 3:03:00 AM

    Becca this is an outstanding write and so very true, loved it, is this true what Frank has blogged about? I haven't been on line much latetly but you are a great talent here and I ask you not to go and let the other person win..if you want my advice soup me...David

    Lucas Avatar Becca Lucas Date: 1/9/2013 11:38:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you, David
  1. Date: 1/5/2013 9:25:00 AM

    Beautiful is the word which describes this gem

    Lucas Avatar Becca Lucas Date: 1/9/2013 11:39:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you Charma!
  1. Date: 1/4/2013 10:54:00 AM

    I had to read this one again. I have moved it to my favorites.

    Lucas Avatar Becca Lucas Date: 1/9/2013 11:41:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Wow, that is an honor! Thank you Rick.
  1. Date: 1/4/2013 9:56:00 AM

    Wow...subtle, with a major impact. Love the comparisons. The big picture is this poem. Loved it!

    Lucas Avatar Becca Lucas Date: 1/9/2013 11:40:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you, I really appreciate that! :)
  1. Date: 1/4/2013 4:59:00 AM

    I don't know what to say...as it always seems to take me a minute or two to gather my thoughts after such a shock. First you come here and dominate this site with unparalleled physical Beauty...that not being enough...you challenge all with a brilliant blog that shows a beautiful fighting heart and spirit! Now this? unparalleled Magnificent Poetry...A Rising Star is fast emerging...and I'm your biggest FAN.

    Lucas Avatar Becca Lucas Date: 1/9/2013 11:41:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    :) You make me smile
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