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Gardenias


The heady scent that summer evening 
glorified a lady much adored; 
musky premonitions of an unrequited love, 
a passion much too deep to be ignored. 

All-consuming frenzy, reason did not rule 
his fevered mind. She had said, 'no more!' 
yet he can't accept her condemnation, won't endure 
a heartache that would cut him to the core. 

Another man vied for her favours, 
she answered in kind with a vow 
to be faithful for evermore, sealed with a kiss, 
what obstructions would hamper her now? 

The two men met at dawn with pistols drawn, 
back to back they readied for the fray, 
their seconds stood at hand to ensure a fair result, 
one man would lose his life that fateful day. 

Gardenias fill the air with the fragrance of desire; 
two men at odds, emotions frayed, yet resolute. 
Two shots resound through early morning light, 
one man lies dead, the other's hopes are moot. 

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  1. Date: 12/30/2012 8:57:00 PM

    wow, you did a really good job with this one. I see so few people using enjambment and it's obvious this has been cleverly crafted. Love it!

  1. Date: 12/30/2012 7:36:00 AM

    Dear Keith - Gone the duels of a lovesick fool. Now we have the assault weapon used for lesser reasons. love you, Kathy

  1. Date: 12/20/2012 5:35:00 PM

    i love the way you've used the scent of gardenias to weave this poem together and you've done that quite brilliantly. your language is exquisite, as always...

  1. Date: 12/20/2012 5:01:00 PM

    You take us back to another time and place in the well written piece! Really enjoyed it my friend! Kudos!

  1. Date: 12/20/2012 3:35:00 PM

    lovely fragrant poem Keith

  1. Date: 12/20/2012 2:29:00 PM

    Ahh..The savagery of desire Keith, the fragrence Of the flower...All independant of reason and Interdependant of those decisions and actions Of the hour.."

  1. Date: 12/20/2012 1:32:00 PM

    A very good poem, Keith. - Glad I chose your poem tonight. - Wishing you and your loved ones a peaceful and happy Christmas! - *** oxox / / Anne-Lise :) *** -

  1. Date: 12/20/2012 1:05:00 PM

    Keith I like this a lot as well as Gardenias...David