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BEAUTIFUL LIES

      


                      Beautiful Lies

        Gazing on your beloved face sublime,
        Love’s mist reflection blazes in your eyes--
        Because I know I have so little time,
        I whisper kisses with the same old lies.
        Each time I vow that I will never leave.
        Tho caught again bereft that I must go.
        The simple truth too cruel to believe
        And hiding truth retains our lovers’ glow.
        Reality is killer to love’s plans,
        No matter how both lovers promised true.
        No man's vision has passion more consumed
        Than my yearning eyes nourished sight of you.
               You slept---and I slipped silent through the door--
               Donned uniform and headed back to war.

             
 written 12/10/2012  (alternate ending for the 21st centuray average man)

                         Beautiful Lies

        Gazing on your beloved face sublime,
        Love’s mist reflection blazes in your eyes--
        Because I know I have so little time,
        I whisper kisses with the same old lies.
        Each time I vow that I will never leave.
        Tho caught again bereft that I must go.
        The simple truth too cruel to believe
        And hiding truth retains our lovers’ glow.
        Reality is killer to love’s plans,
        No matter how both lovers promised true.
        No man's vision has passion more consumed
        Than my yearning eyes nourished sights of you.
               She sleeps---and I sneak silent through the door--
               Now dare to seek the playoff football score.



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  1. Date: 2/10/2013 10:10:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win!

  1. Date: 2/8/2013 6:00:00 PM

    haha, how cute the way you did american man too. BIG congrats and I am hoping you are well. Luv, Andrea

  1. Date: 2/5/2013 5:59:00 AM

    Congratulations Victoria xx

  1. Date: 2/4/2013 10:04:00 PM

    Victoria, a wonderful winning poem~ PD

  1. Date: 2/4/2013 9:53:00 PM

    superb creativity...Congrats..

  1. Date: 2/4/2013 1:14:00 PM

    So cool you did two ending! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

  1. Date: 12/15/2012 6:42:00 AM

    Hello Victoria, I love both versions. If I had to choose between the two I would choose the first with a somber ending to a somber poem. But I love the second one too with it's humorous ending at the end. Well done!

  1. Date: 12/13/2012 8:24:00 AM

    Dear Victoria - You are wonderful. The stark sad scene in #1 is heart wrenching and amazing how you change all that in #2. What a wit. love, Kathy

  1. Date: 12/11/2012 2:15:00 AM

    Wonderfully written sonnet. It is a little unclear however who is writing to whom. Anyway excellent poem.