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The Waking up of the Extremis - Act One

first draft

Cast of characters:

Atharia – a female hospital attendant
Voice – a voice, an observer
The doctor – a male doctoctor
mortuary attendant
Grave diggers
Patients…
 
Setting: Hospital, Graveyard

ACT ONE 
Scene One
 [at a grave site in the night

owls hooting
gravediggers quietly
head to the site]

[Voice]:Silence encompasses the graveyard –
That’s what you think…
When the night comes the grave diggers arise.
Don’t be so shocked…
Yes, the loved one you thought you’d buried has been displaced, totally.
Body burnt; another one takes his place.

Men digging the grave, removing coffins, men stripping
the dead of their clothes, pressing clothes, packaging
clothes, men piling up
dead bodies into a pit, burning dead bodies

[scene fades]

Scene two
[at the hospital
Patients lining up, 
hospital attendant checking to see who has insurance. Turning
away those who don’t.
Atharia walking through the hospital.]


[Atharia]:call it TRIAGE –
the process of deciding who should be saved first:
Simply put – no money, no service. Deal.
Rundown hospitals the shame of our nation. But whose shame I ask?
Not of the ones whose sneeze books them a
private room in a private hospital.
Not of the ones who fly abroad for ‘checkup’ just because.
And certainly not of the ones whose companies guarantee bills are paid – the amount is irrelevant.
But shame of the poor man and his spawns.
Shame of the pride filled doctors and discourteous nurses who turn away
the patients they took an oath to serve and save. 

[Nurse hands clipboard to doctor]


[Doctor]:Ah ah, not my shame.
Shame of the corrupt business man who values money and snuffs out life of 
the unsuspecting
Shame of the powerful politician who colludes with port officials to check in
 containers filled with counterfeit drugs.
Shame of the government chemist who gives a clean bill of health to 
suspicious drugs and medical equipments.
Shame of a government which fails to protect its citizens
because let’s face it the poor man has no voice.

[Doctor enters theatre bangs the door shut]


[Patients]:Who will cry out for the downtrodden woman who dies 
giving life?
Who will heed the mourning of the once vibrant
man now ravaged with HIV?
Definitely not them!
Triage is a game
only the rich
can win.

[theatre light blinks red; eerie music heard]


ACT TWO

Scene one
[Song of mourning.
Doctor seen harvesting organs from deceased, organs
put in freezer, body stiched up]

[Voice]:Oh yes, it’s a booming business.
Doctors collude with workers to fleece the dead of their 
inward body parts
Ha ha ha! Your fear of the dead makes it so easy!
It’s not your fault.
A kidney there, a heart here – vanished, body quickly stitched up.
Dead bodies piled up in the morgue, but for extra cash, then
Your dearly departed will be handled with care.
And you’ll be too pleased to part
with more cash – little
do you know but –
he’s not whole!
It’s not like you’re gonna check him, now is it?

[Sounds of mourning get louder as doctor breaks the news.
Atharia leads the deceased family to the morgue.]


[Atharia]: Death oh death
The stealer of souls
The equalizer of men.
Who spread your wings and gave you wind to fly?
Who sharpened your claws and put 
you above all else?
The infant boy you have swallowed alongside the toothless man.
The vibrant girl, you did not give a chance
to say a word.
Look at the poor woman crying for her only child,
don’t you feel shame when you destroy their worlds?

[Atharia stops in her tracks as reach a door
labeled abortion clinic.
Doctor opens door to admit a woman.]


[Doctor]:Don’t dare say a word – pro life; pro choice
Who am I to choose?
What do I know of the goings on in a woman’s head?
Who am I to tell a teenage girl to put her life on hold because
of a mistake she made?
Or tell her to live on hope when the father bailed out
and her family are barely surviving?

Life begins at conception, you say.
But what kind of life is it?
See, the woman who was raped by a gang. Look her
in the eyes and tell her that life is
a gift.
Why do you stutter? 
Provide a solution or get out of my way.

[Doctor bangs door shut]



Continued in Act Three……

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  1. Date: 12/19/2012 10:04:00 PM

    Vicky, congratulations on giving Tracie, "What she rEaLlY rEaLlY WaNt-ed"..lol... always~ PD.....

  1. Date: 12/18/2012 6:45:00 PM

    I remember this one. Congrats. I see it's on the contest's winner's list.

  1. Date: 12/18/2012 5:01:00 AM

    Vicky you always are a marvel to behold anytime. Please what nationality are you? What you painted there is a typical african situation. I am tryin something along this line too. You are good!

  1. Date: 12/18/2012 4:37:00 AM

    Congratulations on your Vicky love xx

  1. Date: 12/11/2012 10:59:00 AM

    Your poetry is adventurous and beautiful, just like you Vicky.

  1. Date: 12/8/2012 7:18:00 AM

    Great write Vicky. It is always the less fortunate who end up paying. Thanks for sharing. Lucilla

  1. Date: 12/6/2012 9:12:00 AM

    Excellent Vicky, I feel the pain and injustice from this write. Well done.

  1. Date: 12/5/2012 4:05:00 PM

    A very interesting play you have come up with here. Later I will read the other parts. A good start to it. You make me feel that anger that I already have inside me toward the corruption of uncaring governments and business.

  1. Date: 12/4/2012 6:34:00 PM

    This is very good...it really captures your attention. I like it...xxoo Holly Thanks for your gracious and caring. Someday my veil will lift, but the salt in the timer drips slowly...Hugs, Holly

  1. Date: 12/4/2012 6:29:00 AM

    I lack the knowledge of this style so I can only speak based on my emotioal reaction and how effective you are at causing emotion. Based on my reaction I would say this is substantive. I am drawn into the story and I care and feel the injustice and the helplessness of the cast as well as see the hypocrisy of the system. To me this work has great value. I was also entertained. Good job Vicky.

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/4/2012 1:53:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    your courage was in tact long before ever meeting me. You are a fearless writer, I am curious to how you express your self in person. I sometimes think the writing voice is a more accurate portrayel of the person that lays within.
    Tsiluma Avatar Vicky Tsiluma Date: 12/4/2012 7:16:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you for your kind words Richard. Venturing into a new thing is never easy but with wonderful people like you, courage is born.
  1. Date: 12/3/2012 6:27:00 PM

    Because I have no idea what is 'correct' the only thing I can say is of course I am as aghast as you! I don't understand giving a verse a characters name though and then still speaking in narrative and not dialogue?

    Tsiluma Avatar Vicky Tsiluma Date: 12/4/2012 1:47:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Debbie!!!! You're supposed to help! I'm counting on you! The names are for the performers of the verse.(I"m starting to think this is going to be much harder than I'd thought). Heeeeeeeelp someone, anyone?
  1. Date: 12/3/2012 4:55:00 PM

    Poet’s note: As a poet, I would like to transition from written poetry to verse drama(kinda like a play but in poetry). As I embark on this journey, wherever it will take me, any comment, suggestion, criticism, observation and encouragement given would be highly appreciated. - Vicky Tsiluma.

    Sibanda Avatar Ndaba Sibanda Date: 12/18/2012 12:38:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    This is a very artistic piece written with courage. Keep it up!