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Alone on a River



The picture on the wall depicted a man rowing a 
Boat... staring at her intensely… her gaze was transfixed
She hated the picture as long as she could remember, 
Ever since her father had brought it home, he won it
In a bet from a Chinaman…
He had EVIL eyes, a sly grin, she felt a cold sweat 
every time she walked past it, she tried not to look,
But her vision was pulled towards it… she felt as if…
He wanted her!
She had had this dream before, now once more
As night time fell and darkness encircled the room,
Her fears returned.
All she could think of was… the picture…the evil it held
The fear it brought to her.
Suddenly she screamed, she felt hands around her neck
They were wet! She felt as if she was …drowning
struggling to breath she fought hard, kicking the night air!
Until…silence remained…
In the morning her bed was empty, sheets were water stained.
She was nowhere to be seen, except in the picture
Was the Chinaman and now a woman sat behind him…

© 28/11/2012  David Williams

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  1. Date: 12/13/2012 6:39:00 PM

    Really scary David. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 12/13/2012 2:05:00 PM

    UT oh the cursed picture got her! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

  1. Date: 12/13/2012 11:53:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win in Leonora's "Waking Up" contest David. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 12/13/2012 12:51:00 AM

    Congratulations on your winning spot once again David xx

  1. Date: 12/13/2012 12:00:00 AM

    Very well penned David! ....spooky, and the waking up part is scary. It's like being suspended in a never ending nightmare. Congrats on your win!

  1. Date: 12/12/2012 8:06:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win my dear David! Thank you so much for your full support! love and hugs, Leonora

  1. Date: 12/3/2012 7:45:00 AM

    Very nice tale you have spun David, like something i think i saw once on twilight zone, blessings Carl

  1. Date: 12/3/2012 2:31:00 AM

    it is a good poem,

  1. Date: 12/2/2012 5:58:00 AM

    another wonderful poem from you David, one is taken there, to live within the poem, it is so intense...

  1. Date: 11/29/2012 10:43:00 PM

    This is very intense. I like this kind of poetry. Great piece. -- Sean

  1. Date: 11/29/2012 2:39:00 PM

    Wow! really enjoyed this David. It reminded me of a story or movie-something from the murky depths of my mind-where someone was swallowed up into a picture. Was definately holding my breath while I read! And thanks for stopping by. :) Tanya

  1. Date: 11/29/2012 1:46:00 PM

    Powerful entry---thank goodness it was just a dream! U are great at these sort of writes, matey!! Suspenseful indeed! :) gwendolen

  1. Date: 11/29/2012 4:20:00 AM

    I felt the suspense as I was reading your poem! The ending puzzles me. Clever write! Thanks David for visiting my corner. Dalila

  1. Date: 11/28/2012 11:31:00 PM

    great poem for the contest! hope you score well.

  1. Date: 11/28/2012 6:47:00 PM

    this is very creepy but so well-written and suspenseful that you had me itching to see how it would end. thanks for the treat!

  1. Date: 11/28/2012 4:38:00 PM

    That is so cool. I now see what a true dramatic verse is. Really, really good. I loved it! I soup'd you 2x. I'm trying to write a Ghazal. Thanks for your comments...xxoo Holly

  1. Date: 11/28/2012 2:49:00 PM

    Very creative piece David , kind of creep me out a little bit though(lol) - Dio

  1. Date: 11/28/2012 2:37:00 PM

    Scarey write, loved it. Completly drew me in from beggining to end. Perfect ending!

  1. Date: 11/28/2012 12:07:00 PM

    Very nice, David... I'm left with a weird sensation... I have a picture of a single eye... I'm going to place it facing the garden window - forest view... just in case I should someday also be transmuted... The eye and I will have something to think about... Terry (great poem)

  1. Date: 11/28/2012 11:52:00 AM

    I had an inkling at where you were taking me through this poem! The ending was incredible but I might have been there before you described it...sorry, just my imagination running wild too! We must have thought along the same lines with this write! I love where you went with it, very awesome poem my friend! What a powerful piece this one is!

  1. Date: 11/28/2012 11:25:00 AM

    ‡ I Felt Especially Upon This Well Scripted Verse, Dear Precious David, That I Was Viewing A Twilight Zone's Episode ? I Remember This One Wherein A Beautiful Girl Turned Out To Be A Werewolf ? I Believe That Was My Favourite All Time In Re The Zone. Oh Yesss, Her Lovely Beauty When Not Human Was A Beautiful Pure White Wolf. Cool Poe And Let's Hope No One Else Ends In That Boat With Them, LOL. Thank You For Passing By And Your Kind Comment. 'Happy Holidays.' Love Always, Rachel *

  1. Date: 11/28/2012 10:44:00 AM

    Your ending surprised me as well until the last seven line then it read like a twilight zone episode. Very entertaining. Thank you for sharing.

  1. Date: 11/28/2012 10:17:00 AM

    David, you definitely put me in the midst of all this! Love the imagery in this one. Held me captive and I didn't expect that ending ;)

  1. Date: 11/28/2012 9:24:00 AM

    great work .. you had me there for a while .. pondering... one love annie

  1. Date: 11/28/2012 8:55:00 AM

    A fanciful idea, and a great opportunity for a poem. I can see in my mind a number of possibilities. Fun!

  1. Date: 11/28/2012 8:33:00 AM

    Very captivating work that caugh my attention and held it until the end..No good for my heart condition though..Thanks for stopping by..I have to go now and finish up lunch for my family will want to be eating soon..Sara

  1. Date: 11/28/2012 8:26:00 AM

    i can draw the pic' in my thoughts..... i just imagine the terror!anyways well penned!

  1. Date: 11/28/2012 8:21:00 AM

    Brilliant write you penned here David. Wish you best and have a wonderful day. Hugs and luv, Gail

  1. Date: 11/28/2012 8:07:00 AM

    Creepy that picture is now off my wall , how did you know it was there anyway ?xx

  1. Date: 11/28/2012 7:37:00 AM

    Hi david brilliant will read it again when I can summon up the courage to come out from behind the couch, all the best my friend Owen

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