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The sky is weeping
Tears of relief and despair.
I absorb them all.

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  1. Date: 12/3/2012 6:09:00 AM
    Congratulations on your super win in Charles' "Haiku" contest Ira. I am sorry this is a very late comment. Love, Carol

    Dawson Avatar Ira Dawson
    Date: 12/3/2012 8:11:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks so much for taking the time to stop by and leave a comment!
  1. Date: 11/25/2012 8:31:00 AM
    outstanding metaphor. I LOVE it. Congrats on a well deserved win in the contest.

    Dawson Avatar Ira Dawson
    Date: 11/25/2012 11:54:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you so much! Honestly.
  1. Date: 11/24/2012 6:20:00 PM
    Congrats on your win..Sara

  1. Date: 11/24/2012 8:50:00 AM
    Deep write Ira - relief and despair in equal measure seem to be what befalls mankind. Congrats on your win!

  1. Date: 11/24/2012 5:40:00 AM
    Big congratulations on your win Ira, hugs xx

  1. Date: 11/23/2012 6:13:00 PM
    Ira, congratulations with your haiku win,,, take care..pd

  1. Date: 11/16/2012 6:58:00 AM
    I will give you the very easy stuff first [though folks have been arguing over haiku form from day one what I tell you most agree on] #1 no titles [the point is to give as much insight as you can in under 17 syllables, using a title is like cheating] #2 no punctuation except for proper nouns and to indicate the cut/juxtaposition/shift in focus

    Guzzi Avatar Debbie Guzzi
    Date: 11/16/2012 6:59:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    #3 no poetic vehicles [because these color the write with your judgement of the scene- alliteration in small dose is the only 1 which is ok - much much later we can speak of metaphor] KEEP reminding yourself the write should be 'as simple as porridge' [oatmeal ;)]
  1. Date: 11/15/2012 6:03:00 PM
    This is lovely and uses personification which makes it more like free verse to haiku-a-fy it, it would look like this [a light rain fell/upon the dry ground--my tears blend] It's a very very hard form to learn! If you want haiku help I will be glad to help or just tell me "Debbie let me BE!" I will! just trying to help..Light & Love